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The Dance before Death
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venkat
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Thursday, 12th February 2004 @ 01:07:21 AM in AEST
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I call Him Siva, again and again Siva
I pray Him to appear before mind’s eye.
O Siva, appear in the gem studded hall in
My heart to destroy sins and to bless me
With a vision for my blissful salvation!
I am not enamored of the celestial joys
I did not desire the worldly possessions
I only want to witness thy blissful dance
O Great God! Grant me this last desire!!
Here in the great dancing hall of my heart
All Gods and goddesses joined to create
Orchestra to Thee with various instruments;
Thy cosmic Bull took charge of the drums
The lord of speech taken up the cymbals
Vishnu a double sided drum, Mother Kaali
A clarion and the goddess of speech a lute
Laxmi the goddess of beauty a wind pipe,
Indra a flute and Bana a thousand faced drum
The other gods various kinds of instruments!
O Siva O Lord of universe O Lord of Lalita
Art thou ready in the minimum attire revealing
All thy features having a tiger skin of delusion
Around thy loins fastened and ashes of nebulas
Smeared allover thy shining crystalline limbs
And the snakes of cosmic winds with lustrous
Red gems on their hoods did intertwine with
Thy matted locks and a crescent moon shines
In thy locks where the heavenly Ganges with
Currents of the milky ways hidden like a lotus;
Thou hast entered the hall of gems in the evening
Twilight with smiles of lightening on thy face
Doest thou bestow divine sight to see thy dance!
At the very sign of thy brow cosmic bull Nandi
Sounded the drum of Naandi to start thy dance
It was like the chants of Omkara and Humkara
Hum, hum, dhim, dhim, hum, hum, dhim dhim
Was followed by the orchestra of the gods and
Goddesses with lute, flute, clarion and the pipes
In sweet tune along with rhythmic beat of drums
The Goddesses of speech, beauty and power started
Their chorus as Mother of the world began to sing
In the accompaniment of the musical instruments!
Siva, the Lord of eternal time and the King dancer
Commenced his dance with rhythmic movements
Of his limbs while the gods were thrilled with joy;
His bound up matted locks loosened by the tempo
Of his dance, and sprays of water from heavenly
Ganges on His head sprinkled all around on the gods
And swift movements of his spreading matted locks
Scattered the stars in the sky like jasmine flowers and
The vigorous movements of his hands scattered a mist
Of the sacred ashes of the nebulas and galaxies lost
Created the illusion of a white curtain behind him
As sages, celestials reverently smeared the sprinkled
Ashes on their chests to attain the eternal bliss of Lord;
As the dance gathered momentum along with the song
Meaning rendered by the hands, and the moods by
The glances, and rhythm marked by the feet of Lord,
Where the hands moved the glances followed; and
Where the glances went the mind followed; and
Where the mind went the mood followed; and where
The mood went there was the flavor of supreme bliss!
As I witnessed the dance of Lord I heard holy chants
And the mantras surging forth in rhythmic crescendos
Om Namah Sivaya, Hara, Hara Mahadev Sambho Om
Then after a hush, Brahma and Saraswati started a hymn
In a low voice along with playing of the lute and flute
While other instruments were silent, then light became
Dim, and nothing was visible except the dance of Lord
Who seemed to have withdrawn the entire universe into
His supreme self of bliss and looked as though the Lord
Danced far beyond the darkness in his own effulgence
And turned into Great Ocean of light spreading the light
To the quarters through waves of dancing bliss; there after
I turned into a star and merged in the waves of blissful light!
Om Namah Sivaya!
12-2-2004
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Re: The Dance before Death
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by mountainhigh on
Thursday, 12th February 2004 @ 01:22:59 AM AEST
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| And the heavens were at bliss and on earth, all was calm. The building of a life and the testament. Vey very nice. Thank you for sharing. |
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Re: The Dance before Death
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by emystar on
Thursday, 12th February 2004 @ 01:56:39 AM AEST
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Breathe taking oh my dear friend.
I could feel the moves and the drums.
Very powerfull and awesomely beautyfull.
what is a lute?
It's like the whole poem is a heavenly dance of the universe.
thanks for sharing. It's awesome!
luv, hugs,
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Re: The Dance before Death
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by Avarice_Riot on
Thursday, 12th February 2004 @ 02:16:08 AM AEST
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| Amazing write....it's very epic, my head was flooded with all the images you painted. Overwhelming indeed... |
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Re: The Dance before Death
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by ladyfawn on
Thursday, 12th February 2004 @ 02:16:31 AM AEST
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| very cool poem, love the vivid images, the music would be so lovely to hear too, beautifully written all told, and i love the enchanting ending as well; i see you have your heart, mind and soul within' this piece :) huggers n' love nessa |
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Re: The Dance before Death
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by SensitiveSoAbused on
Thursday, 12th February 2004 @ 02:24:47 AM AEST
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i enjoyed this greatly.. it is very musical..
i liked the hum hum dhim dhim part that was cool onomatopia
um because of the enormity of the peice as in the amount that is packed into every line i think it could be maybe 2 stanzas shorter. i noticed this is where i began to lose grasp of the piece as an entirety.
trivially, some of the words were repeated such as heavenly ganges... this is never a good thing to practice in any sort of writing, as diversity expresses creativity...
you should try to decrease your use of the word 'the' . since poetry is often about utilizing the richest and powerful words and harnessing them with as little obstruction, words such as these that are all but unnessecary appear as tiny black holes that suck the interest and life out of otherwise terribly impacting poetry.
you must realize that if i didnt value your poem greatly i wouldnt have taken the time to comment on it. as i said, i really enjoyed this peice. it hits me with the same fullness of writing as Tolkien's writing. but true to my nature, if i see things that i find lacking, i will comment as such.
good luck,
keep up the power,
sincerely,
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Re: The Dance before Death
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by venkat on
Thursday, 12th February 2004 @ 03:15:47 AM AEST
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Dear SensitiveSoAbused,..your suggestion about use of "the" is a good one.I do agree on it. On remaing points I may differ.Any way
I enjoyed your criticism.thank you very much. venkat
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Re: The Dance before Death
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by lovingcritters on
Thursday, 12th February 2004 @ 03:39:38 AM AEST
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Dear friend Venkat, I become completely submerged in your beautiful pagentry! Your graceful word, images, harmonious lines, and of course the love that eminates from within your heart to always make you roems masterpieces of art!
Exceptionally eloquent, and delightful, Venkat.
and thank you so much for telling me you had
posted it.......I hate to miss you lovely writes
Warm Poetic Love
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Re: The Dance before Death
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by StarBeneathTheStairs on
Thursday, 12th February 2004 @ 04:10:07 AM AEST
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This is absolutely brilliant! I really felt like I was there joining in the festivities! I cannot say anything else, for all that I feel has already been mentioned....so thank you very much for sharing...and I 'm hoping for more great poems...
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Re: The Dance before Death
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by Ilhar on
Thursday, 12th February 2004 @ 05:01:58 AM AEST
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very moving and uplifting thank you for sharing
Shari |
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Re: The Dance before Death
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by chandramohan on
Thursday, 12th February 2004 @ 05:22:40 AM AEST
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my dear venkat
this is really a great poem.
i enjoyed the picturusqe cosmic dance of lord shiva,the endevour of all yogis.
this is a great gift of "shivaraatri festival "
to one and all.
Lord shivas blessings to you.
thank you.
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Re: The Dance before Death
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by bhavnas on
Thursday, 12th February 2004 @ 06:31:42 AM AEST
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magnanimous ,opulent ,versatile ,a description so vivid that i was actually envisioning ur beautiful creation......
when lord loveth u ,
he giveth to u his power ,
his power to let u envision him ,
u made him dance ,
proves on u he has his glance.
wonderfully written...the musical instruments ,deities .rhythmic usage of words all add to the rythm of the poem....kudos |
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Re: The Dance before Death
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by kalika_vidya on
Thursday, 12th February 2004 @ 07:13:06 AM AEST
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Only a fool can find faults with this master piece..Immensely beautiful and magnificent work of art....it stands on the top at any time.
salutes and roses at your feet... K
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Re: The Dance before Death
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Thursday, 12th February 2004 @ 07:21:11 AM AEST
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Dearest Venkat, this is truly a masterpiece... I always seem to get to your poems after everything has been said..... just our timing I guess.....
The imagery here is superb....loved the ending...
Jenni |
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Re: The Dance before Death
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by Vitreous_Soul on
Thursday, 12th February 2004 @ 07:37:33 AM AEST
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A true epic in every sense of the word, the incredible scope of this piece left me speechless. These rich, vibrant images are all I can see when I close my eyes. Yes, this may very well be your finest work (although there's plenty of competition!). Take a bow, you've earned it.
Truly,
-V.S. |
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Re: The Dance before Death
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by LOWMAN613 on
Thursday, 12th February 2004 @ 01:03:56 PM AEST
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| Wow breathtaking ! This was one of your best works! Great job! Christina |
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Re: The Dance before Death
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 13th February 2004 @ 05:07:28 AM AEST
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your poem is an epic in every sense
It is thrilling, vibrant, most glorious and most wonderful..I have no words to describe its greatness..kudos. Snigdha
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Re: The Dance before Death
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 17th February 2004 @ 12:16:10 PM AEST
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What authentically intrinsic words that flow like a river of beauty! I am in awe of your masterpieces! Thank you for pointing me in the right direction on this one. I am honored to have beheld such beauty on my screen today! Thank you for all your kind words. You are an inspiration to me spiritually and in my writing!!!
~~~Angel always~~~godspeed...~joni~ |
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Re: The Dance before Death
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 27th February 2004 @ 06:07:56 PM AEST
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This is worthy of the highest praise. The beauty and spiritual truths here are like a vision of an exquisite realm in the mind. You presented us a glimpse into Nirvana. Magnificent, my honored friend, absolute magnificence.
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Re: The Dance before Death
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by Hurretje on
Wednesday, 24th March 2004 @ 06:23:01 AM AEST
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This is wonderful. You know, I was born in Indonesia and adopted by Dutchies, so I have a rather 'western' mind, but they way you wrote this prayer really awoke something in me. It dances, I can hear the rhytm in my mind. Splendid.
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Re: The Dance before Death
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by Queen_Dolly on
Tuesday, 13th April 2004 @ 07:02:10 AM AEST
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Breath-takingly beautiful =)
Thank you for sharing.
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Re: The Dance before Death
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by ammalu on
Saturday, 17th April 2004 @ 06:20:18 AM AEST
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Sir, a GREAT piece indeed - Amazed at such a lengthy flow of deep feelings-bringing a real PICTURISTIC views-desires compliments& more reads-'the flavour of supreme bliss' both emotional & devotional thoughts-looking forward for many more great pieces-wld. like to read repeatedly-enjoyed well-thanks a lot.
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Re: The Dance before Death
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by Archie on
Sunday, 30th May 2004 @ 04:35:01 PM AEST
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| This is a good poem |
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Re: The Dance before Death
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by kalika_vidya on
Monday, 2nd August 2004 @ 05:21:30 AM AEST
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For ever blissful and soul up lifting
great poem..I will never forget the image
of the dancing Lord Siva as you have described in this magnificent work .
K |
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