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Ghost of a Vampires glare
Contributed by
forever_lonely
on
Wednesday, 11th February 2004 @ 07:09:53 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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A wash of tears in emotions dry
A silent thought of questions why
Lasting forever in sea of moonlight
A broken trust, words of ill sight
Remember the times, locked in my memory
A shadowy ghost, never to be free
We flittered through life, each crack of regret
Each ghost of the shadows making me forget
You watch time whipser, but never grow old
Swallowed the sounds that your soul now sold
A vampire of eternal loss, watching the moonlit glare
We circled round internal hate, lost in its motionless stare
Entrapted within these walls stone cold
Time flies by but you never age old
You cry a tear of lost crimson red
Waiting for the shadow of a ghost now dead.
Copyright ©
forever_lonely
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2004-02-11 19:09:53]
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Re: Ghost of a Vampires glare
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by Necromant on
Wednesday, 11th February 2004 @ 07:27:54 PM AEST
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I love this one!!!!!! Even the title! It draws you to this poem! yay vamp poem! I wanna see more vamp poems!! This one's description is shattering! Wowwww !! Beautiful! The wording is stunning! I Luuuuvvvvvv itttttttt !!!!!! Keep it up!! AMAZING!!
Anne :D:D |
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Re: Ghost of a Vampires glare
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by ladyfawn on
Wednesday, 11th February 2004 @ 08:19:09 PM AEST
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| captivating:) hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Ghost of a Vampires glare
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by arden on
Wednesday, 11th February 2004 @ 11:23:26 PM AEST
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freakin awesome!! that was so good i cant put it into words. great write, loved it!
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Re: Ghost of a Vampires glare
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by Jazz on
Wednesday, 11th February 2004 @ 11:55:40 PM AEST
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It sems to me you used to vampire as imagery, (I hope I am right?). You did this amazingly. The rhythms were perfect, and it seem to stick with me afterwards.. Good poem! I love it!
Jazz |
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Re: Ghost of a Vampires glare
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by Kie on
Thursday, 12th February 2004 @ 12:51:02 AM AEST
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| I have a thing for vampires! This was eloquent and had the perfect flow. More? Hope so... Kie |
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Re: Ghost of a Vampires glare
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by Avarice_Riot on
Thursday, 12th February 2004 @ 02:22:40 AM AEST
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| Wow! That was so dark mysterious but fascinating at the same time! First vamp poem I've read in ages, and by far one of my favorites! Well done. |
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Re: Ghost of a Vampires glare
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by Ilhar on
Thursday, 12th February 2004 @ 05:18:48 AM AEST
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well done shows your true talent
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Re: Ghost of a Vampires glare
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by Vitreous_Soul on
Thursday, 12th February 2004 @ 07:45:25 AM AEST
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Right off the bat, anything vampire related is gonna get my stamp of approval!
Also, this is really the best word usage i've seen from you...."A vampire of eternal loss, watching the moonlit glare
We circled round internal hate, lost in its motionless stare"....c'mon, that's just insanely good! One of your best to date, my friend. Consider me impressed.
Truly,
-V.S.
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Re: Ghost of a Vampires glare
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by Wrybod on
Thursday, 12th February 2004 @ 12:52:51 PM AEST
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I'm here at your request, not of my own chosing and rather (as I was with the other poem you asked me to read,) in a "world"
wherein I find empathy very difficult.
But I know well written poetry when I see it and this certainly fullfills the qualities that I
enjoy.
It is technically very good, in essence,
rhyme and meter. (so many one sees in YPDC do not accept the challeng poetry puts upon us)
I congratulate you on your skill and was stirred by your imagery, much better than I could achieve in this vien.
Perhaps actual experience of war (1939-45)
de-sensitised many of us and we became inured to the impact of "dark poetry" etc.
wanting to shut out anything that reminds us of that time.. Emotional cowards if you like..
bob |
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