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He's Drunk Again, But For The Last Time
Contributed by
Necromant
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Wednesday, 11th February 2004 @ 04:01:02 PM in AEST
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~Whispered~
Shhh just listen, come closer, over here
Shush be still, look his getting near
Stop trembling, don’t breathe, and wipe that tear!
See! He’s drunk again, don’t let him hear
~Shouting~
Run! My dear run! Get out of his way!
Don’t let him touch you, go now, obey!
Call the neighbours or the police, and stay away!
Tonight I won’t forget, no, no regret, he has to pay!
*Crash*
~Whispered~
I love you
*Gun shot*
I still do
*Gun shot*
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Necromant
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Re: He's Drunk Again, But For The Last Time
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by afraid_of_fear on
Wednesday, 11th February 2004 @ 04:27:33 PM AEST
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omg... this is really well written, albeit sad..
charlotte x_x_x |
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Re: He's Drunk Again, But For The Last Time
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by Necromant on
Wednesday, 11th February 2004 @ 04:28:00 PM AEST
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Ok I know this is kinda stupid *Feel embarrased* but since my friend told me that she didn't understand the poem *Cries*, the ending, I just tought to explain it *Scratches her head*. There's a woman, child and Man, *Don't ask me if their names lol* Man comes home drunk, woman and child try to hide, then he finds them, child runs, Woman kills the man after he hits her then kills herself. I know not very happy story but thats the sad reality. Hope I was plain enough, Thanks for reading *Winks*
Anne :D |
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Re: He's Drunk Again, But For The Last Time
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by Necromant on
Wednesday, 11th February 2004 @ 04:28:02 PM AEST
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Ok I know this is kinda stupid *Feel embarrased* but since my friend told me that she didn't understand the poem *Cries*, the ending, I just tought to explain it *Scratches her head*. There's a woman, child and Man, *Don't ask me if their names lol* Man comes home drunk, woman and child try to hide, then he finds them, child runs, Woman kills the man after he hits her then kills herself. I know not very happy story but thats the sad reality. Hope I was plain enough, Thanks for reading *Winks*
Anne :D |
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Re: He's Drunk Again, But For The Last Time
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by forever_lonely on
Wednesday, 11th February 2004 @ 08:11:35 PM AEST
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ane this is amzing, you didnt need to explain yourself this is maybe your best piece it really is amazing teehee
truely a masterful piece
Luke x |
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Re: He's Drunk Again, But For The Last Time
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by Kie on
Wednesday, 11th February 2004 @ 08:20:08 PM AEST
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| Well the ending was climatic! A very good write. Kie |
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Re: He's Drunk Again, But For The Last Time
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by gery_giggles on
Wednesday, 11th February 2004 @ 08:55:02 PM AEST
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whoa this is so close to home *shudders*......very good write...scary and so true
luv always |
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Re: He's Drunk Again, But For The Last Time
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 12th February 2004 @ 12:59:13 PM AEST
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hi lol erm... now I understand lol anne it is really good the poem...I don't know how it came in your mind...you are a great writer at least for me and I am always proud of you remember :)
from your friend...you know who V |
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Re: He's Drunk Again, But For The Last Time
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 12th February 2004 @ 12:59:56 PM AEST
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hi lol erm... now I understand lol anne it is really good the poem...I don't know how it came in your mind...you are a great writer at least for me and I am always proud of you remember :)
from your friend...you know who V |
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Re: He's Drunk Again, But For The Last Time
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by perfection on
Saturday, 20th March 2004 @ 12:29:25 PM AEST
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Truely a great write!
Tears down my face.
You are very bright.
I hope this isnt a true case!
xoxo |
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Re: He's Drunk Again, But For The Last Time
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by Hurretje on
Monday, 29th March 2004 @ 08:01:58 AM AEST
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O no, this is so sad! Beautiful, with a deeply slashing title! This is the way poetry should do its work, when it touches strings that most people would prefer to stay untouched.
Great job!
Hur |
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