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something clever
Contributed by
TaintedOptomist
on
Saturday, 7th February 2004 @ 06:31:38 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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a smile at hand
and i'll build you up
just to break me down
(i think i'm in too deep)
questioning my own selfworth
place you on a pedastle
find comfort in in a lovers arms
victim to her subtle charms
(i think i'm in too deep)
mend forgotten wounds
of loves gone wrong
.......(unfinished)
Copyright ©
TaintedOptomist
... [
2004-02-07 18:31:38]
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Re: something clever
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by emystar on
Saturday, 7th February 2004 @ 06:36:59 PM AEST
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Very good writting.
MORE PLEASE?
LUV, HUGGS,
EMY |
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Re: something clever
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by Shadow on
Saturday, 7th February 2004 @ 06:39:01 PM AEST
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| So far i like it. This seems more like somthing of lyrics though. Somthing like licoln park would do. I'm a big fan so heck ya i like it! good job. My only complaint is that it's not done yet! let me know when it is! |
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Re: something clever
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by TaintedOptomist on
Saturday, 7th February 2004 @ 07:19:33 PM AEST
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| oh god writing is now dead to me i hate likin park.....i wasn't trying for that but yes they are lyrics...never picking up a pen again |
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Re: something clever
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by dolly_dagger on
Friday, 9th April 2004 @ 03:31:24 PM AEST
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if it helps i think it's really great and not at all like linkin park(which no1 can spell 4 some reason)
xxxx |
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Re: something clever
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by deadreckoning1983 on
Tuesday, 10th August 2004 @ 02:30:28 AM AEST
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| well i love that it's not finished. just b/c it's not complete doens't mean it's not a great read. and i happen to like linkin park. musically they are doing something different. |
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