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~she was his evenin' star
Contributed by
ladyfawn
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Saturday, 7th February 2004 @ 04:28:37 PM in AEST
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he wanders 'neath the stars at night,
reveling in their beautiful light,
he glances to the mountains,
at the heights he once attained,
he decides to climb this mountain,
but will his poor feet go up again?
for love was up that peak one time,
he thought as he began the climb,
carefully a sensitive foot is placed,
with conscious racing of the heart,
he wonders will loves weather hold,
or silently tear his world apart,
almost tumbling to rocks below,
and his impending certain death,
he contemplates on letting go;
instead a huge intake of breath,
the peak now right before him;
and brilliant sun is now at full,
oh, to have a quenching drink,
he salivates, begins to drool,
if only love would come to him,
with his life he could start again,
his hopes for love now gone astray,
his hesperus star an alpha ray,
slowly he reaches the very top,
where his poor heart, it almost stopped,
as his world became complete; for
waiting there, dear love so sweet.
~:*:~
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Re: ~she was his evenin' star
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by Necromant on
Saturday, 7th February 2004 @ 04:44:31 PM AEST
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Oh beautiful very beautiful!!!!!! Amazingly written with a deep meaning! At least he didn't give up he reached the top, and most of all reached there alive, would be a pity to reach the top and die, but it would still be worth it ;) Loved it a lot!
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Re: ~she was his evenin' star
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by norm on
Saturday, 7th February 2004 @ 04:55:24 PM AEST
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You write a super A fine poem
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This guy who climbed, I could not be,
I'd like my loves more easily,
I climb a flight of stairs I'm pooped,
The girls I find, I feel quite duped... |
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Re: ~she was his evenin' star
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Saturday, 7th February 2004 @ 05:21:54 PM AEST
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Awww Ness...this is extremely beautiful..... I wish I could get back into writing again.... maybe one day......
Hugs and woofies..
Jenni |
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Re: ~she was his evenin' star
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by DreamWeaver on
Saturday, 7th February 2004 @ 05:42:50 PM AEST
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| A story of courage and hope, something we should all hold on to ... beautiful write Nessa ... Jan |
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Re: ~she was his evenin' star
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by shelby on
Saturday, 7th February 2004 @ 06:02:56 PM AEST
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goes to show the best of things in this life come from puching upward on onward then we are rewarded with the most improtant thing of all LOVE beautiful Nessa!
michelle |
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Re: ~she was his evenin' star
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by emystar on
Saturday, 7th February 2004 @ 06:09:18 PM AEST
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absolutly fantabulas!
luv, huggs,
emy |
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Re: ~she was his evenin' star
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by desertwispers on
Sunday, 8th February 2004 @ 04:03:31 AM AEST
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| fabulous |
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Re: ~she was his evenin' star
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by Rakerman1999 on
Wednesday, 11th February 2004 @ 06:12:46 PM AEST
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This is absolutely beautiful Nessa....and a write I feel in my heart.
Roses at your feet for this one
Larry |
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Re: ~she was his evenin' star
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by New_York_Chick on
Tuesday, 9th March 2004 @ 09:36:43 PM AEST
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| so sad and very touching |
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Re: ~she was his evenin' star
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by emystar on
Tuesday, 16th March 2004 @ 11:24:40 PM AEST
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amazingly beautifull. A master peice.
Jus goes to show ya, if we think we can then we can.
great job.
luv, huggs,
emyThanks , girl for your comments on my work.
luv, huggs,
emy |
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by Cynthia on
Monday, 3rd May 2004 @ 06:02:46 PM AEST
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| Nessa, I thought this was a beautiful write. Truly amazing my friend. Excellent work. *S* Cynthia |
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Re: ~she was his evenin' star
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by hauntedscorp on
Thursday, 6th November 2014 @ 11:52:33 AM AEST
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This flow and rhyme made my heart skip a beat. ;) One of my favourites from you; although that list is getting longer.
Beautiful!
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