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Castles In The Sky
Contributed by
MoonlitAngel
on
Friday, 6th February 2004 @ 05:45:28 PM in AEST
Topic:
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You think that I don't care
That I'm lost in my despair
That I don't stop to think of you
And nothing I say is true
You think that I crave death
That I won't stop to take a breath
That I'm never happy at all
And I'm just waiting to fall
But what you don't understand is that
Behind every tear I cry
Is a bath of love I'm drowning in
In every angry word I scream
Is an endless sea of need
And the truth I never tell is this
Behind every face I wear
Is a girl who's hiding from the world
In every defeated word I pen
Is a silent cry for help
I'm a little selfish
But I have only one wish
You're all I really want and need
And from these binds I'll be freed
I'm a little too quick
To put up walls of steel and brick
I only need a helping hand
And a solid place to stand
'Cause what you don't understand is that
After everything I've lost
All I've felt and been too numb to feel
I'm lost within a broken dream
All I've built has fallen down
The truth I've never told you is this
Sometimes I miss yesterday
And I want my life before you back
'Cause when I threw this all away
Somehow the sky seemed so much bigger
But you're all I really care about
Sometimes you make me forget
Everything that makes me cry in vain
If I don't mean the things I say
It's only 'cause I have no words
The air shines and sparkles around you
My world is more beautiful
When I see it from within your eyes
My broken dreams are whole again
And I build new castles in the sky
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MoonlitAngel
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2004-02-06 17:45:28]
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Re: Castles In The Sky
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Friday, 6th February 2004 @ 05:55:53 PM AEST
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Wow, Moonlit, this is so deep...and so well written.... love the positive ending..
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Re: Castles In The Sky
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by evryrose on
Friday, 6th February 2004 @ 06:39:28 PM AEST
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| You are so passionate, keep up the good work! |
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Re: Castles In The Sky
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by Kie on
Friday, 6th February 2004 @ 08:52:35 PM AEST
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| This poem really touched me. Pain, sadness, inner reflection and the ending was perfect. I think you did really well with this one. Kie |
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Re: Castles In The Sky
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 7th February 2004 @ 12:00:06 AM AEST
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| oh dee, once again a beautiful expression of feelings, images and vividly raw emotion, great title and leaves me feeling hopeful, keep writing! hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Castles In The Sky
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by harshreality on
Saturday, 7th February 2004 @ 03:38:07 AM AEST
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| this was so beautiful and honest. Very touching. I loved it. |
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Re: Castles In The Sky
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by DreamWeaver on
Saturday, 7th February 2004 @ 04:07:40 AM AEST
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| Such an awesome write ... emotionally charged ... I loved every line ... Jan |
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Re: Castles In The Sky
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by LOWMAN613 on
Saturday, 7th February 2004 @ 02:53:16 PM AEST
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| So much emotion & feeling went into this lovely write! Great work! Christina |
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