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I did not lie
Contributed by
mercedes
on
Thursday, 5th February 2004 @ 12:11:31 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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I forgot how you ended up talking to me at first
It hasn’t been very long since
Yet my fears and distrust show through
The end is looming near
I only wanted a friend to confide in
Now I feel I have said too much
My negative attitude can only push you away
As all my insecurities come to light
You would be appalled if only you knew
The number of times I log in to check my mail
Praying and hoping for just a word
Anything as long as it is from you
I have tried to turn my fears into poetry
But lately all my work has been for naught
Very few reads and even less comments
I guess no body believes me
My cry for help is genuine
I’m up against a brick wall
No release to be seen
What more can I say?
Today I will go on and fight
Tomorrow too will come and go
But someday very soon you will see
When I said I cannot go on much longer,
I did not lie.
Copyright ©
mercedes
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2004-02-05 12:11:31]
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Re: I did not lie
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by lil_angel on
Thursday, 5th February 2004 @ 12:15:00 PM AEST
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| aww hun this is a great poem....its so sad....i hope that u find the hope! |
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Re: I did not lie
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by winged on
Thursday, 5th February 2004 @ 12:18:02 PM AEST
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| honey, i love your writing, feel free to express yourself. plz keep writing |
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Re: I did not lie
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by a_bear on
Thursday, 5th February 2004 @ 12:42:45 PM AEST
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| not long ago you posted a comment on one of my poems, and I really appreciated it. I have the same problem...I've been getting reads and no comments. Lots of reads...and it makes me feel like they read my stuff but feel its not worth commenting on. Don't let it get to you. I know my work is good and so is yours...what we have here is a house full of amateurs! stick with it! |
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Re: I did not lie
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 5th February 2004 @ 01:02:52 PM AEST
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Amateurs? This site is full of well rounded people who love to read poetry. I often read and my daggone computer just freaks out when I try commenting. Mercedes? You write beautiful heartfelt poetry! Don't let "no comments" keep you from the deep expressions you have inside.Poetry is a great form of release! Believe me! I believe you! 0:-)
Angel always...godspeed...Joni |
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Re: I did not lie
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by Chadene_Gillespie on
Thursday, 5th February 2004 @ 08:44:46 PM AEST
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| beautiful display of emotion |
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Re: I did not lie
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by EternitysLyre on
Friday, 6th February 2004 @ 12:05:23 PM AEST
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No comments is a compliment of its own. "Aesthetic Rendition," I'm told, is good. But it's at the point where you don't know what to say. So in that sense...
No comments makes its own comment, and it looks like this:
"Your poem, my dear author, is DAMN GOOD. So good that nobody can find anything to say, nor has the guts to in fear of ruining your poem."
Need any more confidence? Start commenting on your own poems. *grins* It always attracts attention.
"Elliptical words for intangible reasons; Elusive mirages of illusional seasons"
~The Palatine Poet |
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