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Black
Contributed by
Rawkergurl2003
on
Tuesday, 3rd February 2004 @ 07:46:25 PM in AEST
Topic:
StoryPoetry
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The screams are getting louder now,
The pain is becoming unbearable.
My vision is getting blurry,
And I can no longer smell the fear.
You’ve captivated me inside this world,
Set me up and let me down.
The blood is getting thicker,
And the wounds are getting deeper.
Do you realize what you’ve done to me?
There is no turning back
Everything has faded to black.
The screams are getting louder now,
The pain is becoming unbearable.
I’m thinking back on all the times,
You held me tight, than pushed me away.
You were never the one for me to run to.
You caused this pain deep within my heart.
The blood is getting thicker,
And the wounds are getting deeper.
Why did you have to be so cruel?
I tried to be what you wanted.
But you only said I wasn’t good enough.
The screams are getting louder now,
The pain is becoming unbearable.
You wonder why I hide inside,
Why I never told a soul.
Do you realize what you’ve done to me?
I’m sorry I could never be.
Mom please forgive me,
But the blood is getting thicker,
And the wounds are getting deeper.
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Rawkergurl2003
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2004-02-03 19:46:25] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Black
(User Rating: 1 ) by Remy on
Tuesday, 3rd February 2004 @ 08:02:23 PM AEST (User
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*conjuring up images in head* whoa... umm, whoa... interesting and creative, but dark and well: "black" i guess is how it's supposed to be written. good writing!
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Re: Black
(User Rating: 1 ) by Vitreous_Soul on
Wednesday, 4th February 2004 @ 02:44:21 AM AEST (User
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Wow, definitely a great depiction of darkness. A whirlwind of anger, hatred, and sadness. Very nicely done.
Truly,
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Re: Black
(User Rating: 1 ) by poisonthewell_chic on
Thursday, 26th February 2004 @ 09:08:34 PM AEST (User
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this is the best poem in the entire god forsaken world!!!!!!! without such words i would be empty beyond empty you should be a billionaire for this!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1 |
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