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A Message From my 'Friend' Bi-Polar
Contributed by
bobotheclown
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Monday, 2nd February 2004 @ 01:33:45 AM in AEST
Topic:
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My mind is bloodied and battered
I'm shaking on my bed cursing my weakness
Trying to ignore the unbearable pull
Of the sharpened metal's embrace,
But I've already been cut so deep
And I doubt anything hurt much more
Chorus:
I am not manic
I am not depressive
I just hover in the ******* MIDDLE!!!
My pen falls from my nerveless fingers
My eyes are wide, but unseeing
I pick up my razor (and consecrate it
as my new pen) With it I shall write
I shove it in my mouth with a bloodied, lusty gasp
And my tongue roves its contours passionately
Chorus:
I am not manic
I am not depressive
I just hover in the ******* MIDDLE!!!
I smile showing off my blood-stained teeth
And I extract the razor with deadened fingers
I lay it down and watch as it corrodes
From my saliva with a satisfying 'hiss'
I pick up a new pen (razor) and touch it
Gently, noticing its sharp bit
Chorus:
I am not manic
I am not depressive
I just hover in the ******* MIDDLE!!!
I strip from my shirt
And fill the tub with boiling water
As I begin to write upon my skin
Beginning to laugh (along with the voices in my head)
As ink dribbles form my arm, and splatters on the floor
Bending suggestively I lick it up with my flayed tongue
Chorus:
I am not manic
I am not depressive
I just hover in the ******* MIDDLE!!!
I sink into the tub sending forth
A gush of ink that turns the water
Crimson, I touch the water lovingly
And wait until the water turns frigid
The voices are whispering to me,
But I struggle to understand them
Chorus:
I am not manic
I am not depressive
I just hover in the ******* MIDDLE!!!
I'm scared now and cold... so cold
I see the words criss-crossed against my skin
And touch each one lovingly, like my own child
Their all so unique and beautiful,
But still I hurt as tears start to form
I lay on my bed alone and forgotten
Bi-polar's message still oozing its ink
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bobotheclown
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2004-02-02 01:33:45]
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Re: A Message From my 'Friend' Bi-Polar
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by waos on
Monday, 2nd February 2004 @ 01:38:34 AM AEST
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| sweet stuff once again |
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Re: A Message From my 'Friend' Bi-Polar
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by Broken_Skin on
Monday, 2nd February 2004 @ 01:59:05 AM AEST
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| 3 nights ago, i cut my self again... this is amazing, thanks for sharing it. |
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Re: A Message From my 'Friend' Bi-Polar
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 2nd February 2004 @ 06:24:33 AM AEST
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| WOW. This was amazing Joel. Absolutely amazing, as always |
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Re: A Message From my 'Friend' Bi-Polar
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by carebear on
Monday, 2nd February 2004 @ 01:27:08 PM AEST
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Hi again
I read this 1 in the email u sent me I really thought this one was well u know i told u in the email i sent u but I loved this part
*But still I hurt as tears start to form
I lay on my bed alone and forgotten
Bi-polar's message still oozing its ink*
alwayz n lyfe
Care
love u sexy bobo |
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Re: A Message From my 'Friend' Bi-Polar
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by Putteragain on
Monday, 2nd February 2004 @ 04:43:26 PM AEST
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I wish you didnt have to suffer this way my prayers for you
emotions shared wide open well done
michelle |
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Re: A Message From my 'Friend' Bi-Polar
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by Chanti on
Monday, 2nd February 2004 @ 07:21:09 PM AEST
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That was ******* awesome Joel! I loved it! Great write, as always.
- Chanti * |
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Re: A Message From my 'Friend' Bi-Polar
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by bobotheclown on
Monday, 2nd February 2004 @ 07:28:38 PM AEST
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Thnx to everyone who read and commented on this poem. I am sorry for the link not working can't figure out that damn HTML. Ne way for all those interested here it is! http://www.mayoclinic.com/invoke.cfm?id=DS00356I
Enjoy! |
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Re: A Message From my 'Friend' Bi-Polar
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by SensitiveSoAbused on
Tuesday, 3rd February 2004 @ 10:19:28 PM AEST
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This is a great write. I really like the metaphorical images of the pen and razor and ink. it is a perspective i never really thought of...
yeah, i read 'I'm Bleeding and I'm Laughing' by me again last night, and man it really made me want to slice myself up some more...
odd, the spoken word and its powers of suggestion...
also joel, i think that the title is very boring, if you want my honest opinion.
i like the last line including 'bipolar's message', but i think you might want ot consider giving the title a less documenting and/or didactic feel.
cheers,
C+ |
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Re: A Message From my 'Friend' Bi-Polar
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by bopeep on
Tuesday, 10th February 2004 @ 08:58:45 PM AEST
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| i love this poem! totally wicked... just one slight little problem. now i'm sad and want to...ya know.... write with my "pen". I hope things get better for you, i love you and care a lot about you... so stop doing stupid things! okay? okay!... i love the poem. keep up the good work. |
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Re: A Message From my 'Friend' Bi-Polar
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by glitter_and_corpsepaint on
Wednesday, 11th February 2004 @ 01:39:47 AM AEST
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that was mindblowing man. really fab. roy was right, you write some really awesome *****.
take care and keep writing. |
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Re: A Message From my 'Friend' Bi-Polar
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by CuttersAngel on
Saturday, 27th March 2004 @ 01:45:03 AM AEST
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| speechless....love it, but speechless.... but i understand it well....ah, and the images i got...chilling, but brings a smile.... nice work |
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Re: A Message From my 'Friend' Bi-Polar
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by Soulless on
Sunday, 4th April 2004 @ 11:07:20 PM AEST
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Extremely disturbing yet extremely good. This clung tightly to my satisfaction. The poem holds much craze and insanity yet the words form out marvelously. Keep it up.
Kisses,
~Soulless~ |
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