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I Cast No Shadow
Contributed by
Vitreous_Soul
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Sunday, 1st February 2004 @ 05:54:46 AM in AEST
Topic:
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I walk this path alone, but one thing follows closly
A twisted unseen projection of haunting misery
I lost my soul back down the road, haven't seen it since
A look over my shoulder reveals mirrored footprints
Walking tired, body aches, this has gone on too long
A junction reached, I choose a path, either will be wrong
I lost my soul midway this path, the spirit clings to me
In a shallow grave I buried him, at the foot of a withered tree
Every word and thought is echoed, multiplied by three
Me, myself and I repeat a harmonized soliloquy
I lost my soul back at the fork, i'd swear that he turned right
What lies behind are clouds of dust, out of mind and out of sight
My marking stone is reached again, I see the familiar boulder
Irony then flaps it's wings, a mockingbird lands on my shoulder
I lost my soul in that miasma, I can hide no more
Angered from this endless circle, I release a tumultuous roar
So there I stand in setting sun, 'neath that withered tree
It's branches cast a silhouette, yet no shadow is born of me
I lost my soul so long ago, it seems a distant past
Until I find that missing piece, this road will forever last
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Re: I Cast No Shadow
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by deathdrop on
Sunday, 1st February 2004 @ 07:20:45 AM AEST
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| if you never find that missing piece, look within your-self, it may not be in there but it's always worth looking, just incase! |
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Re: I Cast No Shadow
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by Ilhar on
Sunday, 1st February 2004 @ 08:36:44 AM AEST
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well written vivid poem...look deep within ...but don't expect to find the old you...learn from where you are now...and find the inner light...come back a better and stronger person than who you were...I know you can do it for I did
Shari |
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Re: I Cast No Shadow
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by Kie on
Sunday, 1st February 2004 @ 01:21:51 PM AEST
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| I love the way you write so much. So much feeling is felt when I read them. This one I found sas but I understood it. I await the next one. May it be soon! Kie |
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Re: I Cast No Shadow
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by EternitysLyre on
Monday, 2nd February 2004 @ 02:27:25 AM AEST
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The irony of the mockingbird. Beautiful.
...Need I say more?
"Verdant propriety restrains the meek; But nothing imprisons the strongest oblique."
~The Palatine Poet
(If only I remembered what all those words meant, instead of just figuring they sounded so nice.) |
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Re: I Cast No Shadow
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by blueheart on
Monday, 2nd February 2004 @ 09:05:59 AM AEST
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| Yet another brilliant poem. Good job. The emotion so evident and the metaphors are amazing. You're one hell of a poet. |
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Re: I Cast No Shadow
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by Eve on
Monday, 2nd February 2004 @ 10:21:35 PM AEST
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VS, this is beautiful. And that's only putting it simply.
Keep writing,
-Eve. |
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Re: I Cast No Shadow
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by DreamWeaver on
Tuesday, 3rd February 2004 @ 07:16:18 AM AEST
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| An extremely good write ... from the title (which is clever) to the last line ... enjoyed this very much ... Jan |
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Re: I Cast No Shadow
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by ladyfawn on
Thursday, 5th February 2004 @ 02:00:30 AM AEST
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| ooooo... an excellent poem! enjoyed it from beginning to end, loved it so much i read it again! lol, when you once more have a soliloquy please post so we may see, this one leaves me wanting moreeee!! hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: I Cast No Shadow
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by forever_lonely on
Saturday, 7th February 2004 @ 08:11:53 AM AEST
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ok dan i am slowly beginning to hate you lol
This was another jaw dropping write by you, The imagery left me on the road, truely a masterpiece
Keep them up dan im dying to hear(or read as the case maybe) more
Luke |
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Re: I Cast No Shadow
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by a_bear on
Thursday, 18th March 2004 @ 10:43:11 PM AEST
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| hey i like this ... pretty good .. my sn on here is actually pyro .. this is my g-ma's sn other than that nice poem |
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Re: I Cast No Shadow
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 14th June 2004 @ 07:40:23 AM AEST
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I like this theme. Well worked and the meter is great -
"t's branches cast a silhouette, yet no shadow is born of me"
Although there are other lines which I don't think fit properly into the overall cadence, such as;
"In a shallow grave I buried him, at the foot of a withered tree"
. . . you have once again given me inspiration to write and pen poems differently. I am impressed by the metering here. Original and themic. |
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