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The Dream (Insanity)
Contributed by
Cobalt
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Sunday, 1st February 2004 @ 04:24:55 AM in AEST
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Yesterday I woke up screaming
Your voice still in my head
Your whole existence a lie
Stab you in the heart with a knife
On my knees again begging
Oh, did I turn you on this time
Filled your soul with my lies
Did you know our love was a lie
Forget about your ascension to me
Dementias got a hold on me
Didn't you break every promise
Didn't you try to break me inside
Bleeding on my knees now
'Cause I'm done begging for life
Gave me every reason to die
Worship your false god means nothing to me
Help me to find a new reason
Take me back closer to you
Rape me just a little bit more
I'll be sure to kill you this time
Raven's Sin
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Cobalt
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2004-02-01 04:24:55]
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Re: The Dream (Insanity)
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 1st February 2004 @ 05:50:27 AM AEST
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| Wow...interesting. Yesh, it is kinda nuts, but I like it! Good write here Cobalt |
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Re: The Dream (Insanity)
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by MoonlitAngel on
Sunday, 1st February 2004 @ 07:05:02 AM AEST
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Another awesome write, Jeff! Love the end!
~ Moonlit |
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Re: The Dream (Insanity)
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by afraid_of_fear on
Sunday, 1st February 2004 @ 07:43:10 AM AEST
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This is so good.. your poetry is amazing, Cobalt..
charlotte x_x_x |
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Re: The Dream (Insanity)
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by afraid_of_fear on
Sunday, 1st February 2004 @ 07:44:54 AM AEST
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This is so good.. your poetry is amazing, Cobalt..
charlotte x_x_x |
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Re: The Dream (Insanity)
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by CuttersAngel on
Sunday, 1st February 2004 @ 11:56:09 AM AEST
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| Don't take this as an insult or anything, but why do you find it nuts? It's dark, I'll admit that....and.. a little twisted, but I don't think it's nuts.. Your writing is mind blowing... |
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Re: The Dream (Insanity)
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by Kie on
Sunday, 1st February 2004 @ 12:51:12 PM AEST
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| Sometimes I wonder if dementia would be so bad? I loved your poem and it did have a slight insanity ring to it. It drew the reader in and the climatic ending was perfect. Kie |
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Re: The Dream (Insanity)
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Monday, 2nd February 2004 @ 09:53:17 AM AEST
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| thanks for sharing Jeff... I'm just in the right mood for this one... it's awesome. :) |
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Re: The Dream (Insanity)
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by cryingonmyporch on
Monday, 2nd February 2004 @ 11:49:28 PM AEST
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It's been a while since I read a really good Strong poem. Very nice poem I loved it loved the way you used the words.
~Amy |
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Re: The Dream (Insanity)
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by Avarice_Riot on
Tuesday, 3rd February 2004 @ 10:36:42 AM AEST
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| Wow! That was EXCELLENT. |
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Re: The Dream (Insanity)
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by bobotheclown on
Friday, 6th February 2004 @ 03:29:41 PM AEST
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How did I miss this one this one was awesome! I loved it never stop writing dude!
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: The Dream (Insanity)
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by Necromant on
Saturday, 7th February 2004 @ 04:19:55 PM AEST
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Oh yeah it has an odd tone to it but the more insane it sounds the more i like it heehee. Loved it in a sort of twisted way :p Keep writing!
Anne ;) |
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