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I Don't Like The Valentine
Contributed by
jeanie
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Saturday, 31st January 2004 @ 01:19:18 PM in AEST
Topic:
AngryPoetry
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I Don't Like The Valentine
What a shame our days are dullness
In which we lose the sense of time
So we need big glaring banners
To make us see, to remind
Of something that we should have paid
Much more attention just anytime
Instead of using one day to satiate
The love-telling demand
All that red to catch your eyes
Check your agenda and what a surprise!
You see the big screamer sign
There's no doubt to claim
The day of St. Valentine
Is here again
With all its
Heart-shaped boxes full of
Heart-shaped sweets in
Heart-shaped wrappings
Run out for a bunch of flowers
It's time to get smart, so better start
To be the one who cares
"Baby, I bought you a heart-shaped heart!"
Love is a burn
An internal file
To see they turn
It into a pile
Of paper hearts coloured red
Makes me feel just sad
Copyright ©
jeanie
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2004-01-31 13:19:18] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: I Don't Like The Valentine
(User Rating: 1 ) by harmoni on
Saturday, 31st January 2004 @ 01:28:31 PM AEST (User
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A nice poem |
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Re: I Don't Like The Valentine
(User Rating: 1 ) by Necromant on
Saturday, 31st January 2004 @ 03:24:21 PM AEST (User
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Hmmm in a way you're right.........The poem is great! Very good flow and rhyme! :D
Anne :) |
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Re: I Don't Like The Valentine
(User Rating: 1 ) by loveisendless on
Saturday, 31st January 2004 @ 03:48:35 PM AEST (User
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TO BAD YOU DON'T LIKE IT,IT'S JUST AN EXTRA DAY,BESIDES YOUR SPECIAL DAY YOU & YOUR LOVER GOT TOGETETHER TO
SHOW HOW MUCH YOU MEAN TO EACHOTHER! BUT IT'S YOUR CHOICE!!
LIVE IT & LOVE IT!!!
DAN!!!! |
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Re: I Don't Like The Valentine
(User Rating: 1 ) by norm on
Saturday, 31st January 2004 @ 04:29:24 PM AEST (User
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I like your poem even tho i suffered a hit
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What you saw upon the site
Is hung in kitchen day and night,
Not to remind us of our feeling,
But to cover a hole in ceiling.
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Re: I Don't Like The Valentine
(User Rating: 1 ) by Aika on
Saturday, 31st January 2004 @ 06:14:32 PM AEST (User
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mmmmm.. oh, you sweet,
one is true, not only one day to show love
but all of them,
Wonderful writing, I must say!!! love, aika |
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Re: I Don't Like The Valentine
(User Rating: 1 ) by Lessa on
Saturday, 31st January 2004 @ 11:33:00 PM AEST (User
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My favorite line "baby i bought you a heart-shaped heart"
i agree on the fact valentines is a very overplayed hoiday, but hey, if the love is there and the thought it there thats all the matters |
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Re: I Don't Like The Valentine
(User Rating: 1 ) by Wrybod on
Thursday, 5th February 2004 @ 01:23:53 PM AEST (User
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I heartily agree...Every day is Valentines day......try my poem "Wolf , with hindsight" (no.2 on my list) I've tried to find another way of saying it
Liked the poem very much, I hate the way so many "occaisions" have become commercialised.
bob |
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Re: I Don't Like The Valentine
(User Rating: 0 ) by Former_Member on
Monday, 9th February 2004 @ 06:10:21 AM AEST (User
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so...that means you won't buy me anything for St Valentine??? :p HAHAHAHAHAHHA, I'm KIDDING :D I don't like that feast too, btw ;)
hehe, well, really nice poem, I like it ;) it's well done, but it's not among my favs of yours but it still is very smart one, as usually yours are ;) yeah, my fav line is "Baby, I bought you a heart-shaped heart!" hahahha, it's just PERFECT ;)
compliments, darling ;)
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