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Hidden Love
Contributed by
Empty_Soul
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Friday, 30th January 2004 @ 08:43:32 PM in AEST
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When I last spoke to her she was crying and told me she had bloke problems, hard to believe because she is so pretty but it made me angry to see her like this so I wrote a poem as its been a while. please comment, I hope u like it:
How i hate these men who treat her like dirt
how i hate these men that make me feel hurt
for to see her cry and to see her in pain
does nothing for me and what do they gain?
I want to hurt them and show them what pain is
all I want is for her to experience complete bliss
Is it too much to ask that she be left alone
or must they torment my sacred moonstone?
My anger for them shall unfurl
and she, my angel, shall uncurl
no longer will she be plagued by tears
no longer will she be afraid of fears
I shall take them in my stride
and wash them away with the tide
strong she shall now become
these foolish men, now undone
I wish her happiness and perfect joy
and these men I shall destroy
all it takes to bring happiness shall i give
and these last few days she can re-live
and now with all my magic cast
maybe she can put this to past
now so happy and never sad
no more to her sorrows will they add.
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Re: Hidden Love
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by lilch4ever on
Friday, 30th January 2004 @ 08:52:09 PM AEST
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| Awww that was sooooo sweet. Aren't you a sweetie :) I loved this poem it was just so beautiful. She'd be lucky to have you by her side. We need more sweet men in the world. Lovely poem just lovely :) |
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Re: Hidden Love
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by whisper-of-night on
Friday, 30th January 2004 @ 09:33:13 PM AEST
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| (*a big round of applause*) YEAH MAN!!! This is what I call A Poem! I love every single line of it! And don't you just hate those men who can't treat the ladies right!!! I am with ya! Go for her I will say! |
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Re: Hidden Love
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by ladyfawn on
Friday, 30th January 2004 @ 09:44:15 PM AEST
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| awww! sooo sweet! beautifully written, maybe you should show her this darling poem:) hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Hidden Love
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by AliB on
Saturday, 31st January 2004 @ 06:14:22 AM AEST
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Brilliant poem, I wish somebody would feel like that about me, tell her how you feel or just show her your poem, I'm sure she'll be absolutely thrilled. Well done.
Ali xx |
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Re: Hidden Love
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by Necromant on
Saturday, 31st January 2004 @ 07:46:06 AM AEST
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Oh wow!!!!!!! This is a very very very beautiful poem written from the heart! Such love expressed wonderfully! I'm really amazed what a sweet thought to write a poem for this very lucky lady :) I hope she reads this poem you've written for her and realises the luck she has to be loved by you :D
Amazing write! Very skilled and talented! ,
Anne :D |
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Re: Hidden Love
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by a_bear on
Saturday, 31st January 2004 @ 09:04:39 AM AEST
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| awwwwww. wantin to hug my teddy bear here. I really like this. Mad that I can find nothing to rip apart...LOL. Why don't you tell her how you feel? With a poetic soul like yours, she probably suspects anyway...or she's a complete fool, which I doubt. Because you couldn't fall for a fool....could you????? |
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