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Addict
Contributed by
jeanie
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Friday, 30th January 2004 @ 03:34:56 PM in AEST
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Addict
I do not take the dose they advise
I refuse coz I wanna criticize
I've never listened to a fashionable voice
And grace doesn't meet my choice
But if I like something trendy
It's pink grapefruit candy
It's got a taste which's never been a waste
Evokes my itch as entered the pitch
Game on!
I love this catchy trap
In two-layered wrap
That seduces me begging for stripping
Swift, soft when clipping
To my lips
I'm caught by the flavour
The real sugar's scent
I take off my armour
Here a warning comes sent...
What does it say, I don't listen though
Leave me in peace, I'm busy here now!
Then a soundless tongue play
Till it melts away
My breath's hopelessly lost
Stay with me, I'm your host(-age)
Let's follow the scheme, I'll obey all rules
This is an exception, time for the deuce
The taste of surrender yet is it sweet
Causes bad addiction which is hard to be healed
I'm gone, stunned and enchanted
By the waterfall that keeps
Me drowning with pleasure
For I love sweets
Copyright ©
jeanie
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2004-01-30 15:34:56]
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Re: Addict
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by Aika on
Friday, 30th January 2004 @ 05:15:00 PM AEST
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Oh ,dear! there is nothing to add, except: excellent!!!
and btw: i agree with you:-) wonderful writing, really. .really .. really.. aika:-) |
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Re: Addict
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by Kie on
Friday, 30th January 2004 @ 05:43:49 PM AEST
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| Really cute, made me smile. Well done. |
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Re: Addict
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by Angelica on
Friday, 30th January 2004 @ 08:28:10 PM AEST
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| This poem made me go, "Wow!". I could virtually taste the sweetness in my mouth as I read it. |
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Re: Addict
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by Necromant on
Saturday, 31st January 2004 @ 11:45:14 AM AEST
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Oh really sweet! Wow what a beautiful 'bunch of messy words ' (quoting) I really loved this! wonderful flow! Leaving the reader with a sweet taste ;)
Anne :D |
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Re: Addict
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 9th February 2004 @ 06:04:55 AM AEST
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it's me, Silchan ;)
awwwww, this poem is super cool :D I think it's my fav ever :D it got really a sweet taste, it's so fresh and spontaneous :D it's transparent and pink as a lollypop and a childish soul :DD, it got fresh trendy air which makes you smell the sweetness of love which it is sweet, but it never makes you sick ;) ah, it just gives me a cool feeling of cuteness :D really glittering poetry, light as a teenager make up :D
wow, more I read it, the more I like it :D :D :D
keep it this way, you're the best ;) :D
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Re: Addict
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by dAWn on
Thursday, 1st April 2004 @ 09:04:32 AM AEST
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| sticky sweet, addictively metaphorical. I LIKE it...:))) |
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