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I Hate
Contributed by
Eve
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Thursday, 29th January 2004 @ 04:43:38 PM in AEST
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I hate the way I can't help you
And when I feel resent when you can't see I'm dying too.
I hate the way your eyes don't care
Because life has jaded you and hasn't been fair.
I hate the scars on your arms
How you always find some way to do yourself harm.
I hate the way you can't see
You're hurting too much and you'll bleed eternally.
I hate the tears that stain your face
Your broken sense of balance and grace.
I hate seeing all you've lost
When you didn't realize this road's cost.
I hate so much the life you live
The pain you have - yet I forgive.
Copyright ©
Eve
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2004-01-29 16:43:38]
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Re: I Hate
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by ShadowDaughter on
Thursday, 29th January 2004 @ 04:49:25 PM AEST
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Wow, nice. A certain poignancy is here and I can just feel the raw emotion in this. Yeah, I can certainly see how it would hurt to write this. I loved the last two lines especially-- what they say, how the sound, and just the nice rhyme flow to it. Very, very, very nice.
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Re: I Hate
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by Merry on
Thursday, 29th January 2004 @ 05:09:44 PM AEST
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A very heartfelt write - I can feel your emotions jump right off the page. Life is a rollercoaster ride at best, up and down we go. So fasten your seatbelt and don't forget to breathe, that's the best advice I have.
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Re: I Hate
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by Vitreous_Soul on
Friday, 30th January 2004 @ 07:41:34 AM AEST
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There I was, reading the poems today...then I came across this. Nothing short of intense, I can completely understand how you felt when you wrote this. The title alone, and the visuals; toss in your usual unique twist and unfathomable talent, and you have emotion in it's purest form.
"I hate the scars on your arms
How you always find some way to do yourself
harm."
That line really hit home with me. Eve, you amaze me.
Keep writing, or have your eyes fall out of your head,
-V.S.
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Re: I Hate
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by Cobalt on
Wednesday, 10th March 2004 @ 01:51:36 AM AEST
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| Oh wow. This was wonderfully written. I ken this very well... |
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Re: I Hate
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by desire on
Saturday, 12th June 2004 @ 09:05:38 PM AEST
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| this is a great peom filled with emotion, you cant help but feel it throgh the whole peom, sad to know such a thing is going on with some one you know...may God bless who ever it is and help them find a better way to deal with life..........i love it |
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