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Poem of 20 Questions
Contributed by
CountryGirl
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Wednesday, 28th January 2004 @ 09:09:30 PM in AEST
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Where is my daddy?
Why doesn't he ever call?
When will I see him?
Does he miss me at all?
What is he like?
Does he really care?
Does he have my picture?
How come he isn't here?
Is he bad or good?
What did he do?
Why did we leave, just me and you?
Did he ever hold me?
What did I do?
Does he hate you, mommy?
Does he hate me too?
What color are his eyes?
Do you remember him?
How long has it been?
Should I try to call him now?
Or should I just forget him too?
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Re: Poem of 20 Questions
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by Letting_Go on
Wednesday, 28th January 2004 @ 09:49:39 PM AEST
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| sadness evident in this write, through the question you are expecting to hear sometime. Everyone wonders, everyone has got the right to ask, to know. Prepare yourself for it now, for when the time comes. Good look into that kind of life you have portrayed. |
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Re: Poem of 20 Questions
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by loveisendless on
Thursday, 29th January 2004 @ 12:00:06 AM AEST
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SOME SO CALLED PARENTS LEAVE YOU WITH TOO MANY QUESTIONS! I LIKE THE WAY YOU WROTE THAT!! TRY READING MY POEM,"MY ONLY WORLD"! IT MIGHT MAKE SOME SENSE! ANYWAY-A GREAT WRITE!!!
DAN!!!! |
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Re: Poem of 20 Questions
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 29th January 2004 @ 12:24:57 AM AEST
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The thoughts are real and painful, the emotion washes through fairly powerfully, but the power of the poem is weakened by the conventional rhymes. The complex, painful thoughts seem tied together with one-sylable, predictably rhymed words (do, you; call, all...).
This is a work where rhyming actually dimminished the strength of the poem--This one would have been much better with no rhymes at all. |
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Re: Poem of 20 Questions
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by Mouth on
Thursday, 29th January 2004 @ 12:35:06 AM AEST
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Just love your mother. There is a reason he is not there, it is him, not you. He'll come around when he is ready. My dad left too. I know it was for the better, though. Hope all is well with you, take care, good poem.
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Re: Poem of 20 Questions
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by forever_lonely on
Thursday, 29th January 2004 @ 04:53:47 AM AEST
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Hey this was a great poem, i wrote one following the same context as this but a little different, it was about a parent leaving, please please do read it, its called 'crying into a sea of passion' your comment would be so appriciated.
This is such a beautiful poem full of those questions we all want to know when in this situation
please keep up the great writes
Luke xx |
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Re: Poem of 20 Questions
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by brandywyne on
Thursday, 29th January 2004 @ 08:02:18 AM AEST
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there are often times in our lives when some questions may never be answered,
other times when you wont even want to know the answer.
I hope you find your answers either way..
good write |
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Re: Poem of 20 Questions
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by Necromant on
Thursday, 29th January 2004 @ 07:27:58 PM AEST
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Oh what a frustrated and sad poem! Hope you sort out the problems and be happy. VEry good write!
Anne :D |
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Re: Poem of 20 Questions
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by amandadawn1982 on
Saturday, 31st January 2004 @ 04:46:06 PM AEST
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| Great feelings and emotions shown in this poem. I guess we all have questions left by our parents, too bad some of them will never be answered. |
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Re: Poem of 20 Questions
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by twinkletoes on
Wednesday, 3rd March 2004 @ 08:35:24 PM AEST
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| thought provoking |
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Re: Poem of 20 Questions
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by karl_wiggins on
Sunday, 7th March 2004 @ 06:55:53 PM AEST
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This is a great poem, Country Gir. The tragedy of divorse is that often the kids blame themselves.
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Re: Poem of 20 Questions
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by Cobalt on
Monday, 8th March 2004 @ 01:28:50 PM AEST
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| I liked this. I've asked these questions too. I hope it comes out right for you. |
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Re: Poem of 20 Questions
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by Sahara on
Saturday, 21st May 2005 @ 01:05:49 PM AEST
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This brought a tear to my eye because these are the questions my son will someday ask me, and I'm not sure if I can give him the solance that he would then seek.
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