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Must Have Done Something Wrong
Contributed by
crlepley
on
Monday, 26th January 2004 @ 11:10:33 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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if i die before i wake
i just want to let you know
you will never be replaced
i do not know how i can show
how much you meant to me
i do not know what i did
i must have done something wrong
i wish i could say it without taking so long
i know now what you meant to me
you meant more than reality
i dont know how to put my heart back together
cause you broke it into pieces
i just wish sometimes we were together again
everytime we kissed
it shot through my veins
everytime you said i love you
i felt i couldnt control the reins
i am tired of how much it just rains...
down on me the feeling of my heart being drained
i must have done something wrong
all the love just cant be gone
it takes more than just one night
tell me what i didnt do right
ill still always love you
times infinity and plus the stars
ill always love you love you with all my might.
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crlepley
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2004-01-26 11:10:33]
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Re: Must Have Done Something Wrong
(User Rating: 1 )
by alecfernadez on
Monday, 26th January 2004 @ 11:50:39 AM AEST
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| This poem is really good, it flows really really well, and your feelings are shown perfectly through out the poem. One small critism, one of which I do all the time, is that some lines are too big and cut up the flow of the poem. The best way to keep up a regular beat is sometimes to use a maximum number of sylabols. But otherwise its pretty much an excellent write |
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Re: Must Have Done Something Wrong
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by Necromant on
Monday, 26th January 2004 @ 01:26:27 PM AEST
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Wow Beautiful touching and loving! Great write!
Anne :D |
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