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I've Searched for so Long
Contributed by
bobotheclown
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Monday, 26th January 2004 @ 02:52:59 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Beside this lonely brook I sit
The birds chirp above me
And the butterflies they twirl
In their endless dance
The green trees sway in the breeze
And as the waters rush by
I sit there water flowing down my cheeks
I wish for peace and wholeness,
But instead I am mesmerized
By the red, meandering line
That flows from my wrist
The sadness is to deep to bear
And I wish I could be anything, but me
As this hollowness a living thing
Awakens its dark self within
As this timeless mantra repeats itself
Only stronger and more persistent
Kill yerself, kill yerself
And like a zombie I stagger to the waters
And drown myself and like my surroundings
I finally find peace
What I have searched for, for so long
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bobotheclown
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2004-01-26 02:52:59]
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Re: I've Searched for so Long
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by 13Hopes on
Monday, 26th January 2004 @ 03:26:12 AM AEST
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Peace for one can be so different of that for another. What ever it is for you, i hope you find it. Great poem to read though.
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Re: I've Searched for so Long
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by emystar on
Monday, 26th January 2004 @ 03:30:01 AM AEST
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Very well said.
It's really sad but the scenery is awesome.
It reminds me when I go down the hill in my back yard and sit by my natural springs. It's there where I leave my woes in the stream of nature. It's always healing to my soul. I luv nature.
Very good write and I hope u find the peace in life that u seek.
luv, huggs,
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Re: I've Searched for so Long
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by shelby on
Monday, 26th January 2004 @ 03:35:21 AM AEST
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bittersweet beautiful vivid images with intense feelings I hope you find the peace your looking for
michelle |
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Re: I've Searched for so Long
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by Necromant on
Monday, 26th January 2004 @ 11:21:29 AM AEST
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Very deep poem, very sad and bitter the ending is a bit perplexing hope you're still heer to read this comment :p Be strong (look whose talking *shhh*) Keep writing!
Anne :D |
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Re: I've Searched for so Long
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by wyrd_faerie on
Monday, 26th January 2004 @ 05:31:40 PM AEST
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| beautiful babe...missing you...xxx |
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Re: I've Searched for so Long
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by Chanti on
Tuesday, 27th January 2004 @ 12:43:54 AM AEST
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Beautiful write...very peaceful, sounds like a nice way to go...
Chanti * |
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Re: I've Searched for so Long
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 27th January 2004 @ 06:37:05 AM AEST
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this is so beautiful.. i can feel the atmosphere so well..
char xxx |
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Re: I've Searched for so Long
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by Merry on
Thursday, 29th January 2004 @ 08:30:55 PM AEST
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very strong images, deeply disturbing really.
Don't do it, we all have our dark and terrible times, but there are those moments tucked into life that are so incredibly beautiful that it makes all the other crap seem unimportant. So stick around for the good stuff.
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Re: I've Searched for so Long
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by carebear on
Monday, 2nd February 2004 @ 01:22:35 PM AEST
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Hey Handsome
wow a very good write indeed I thought this one was very dark an moving and bittersweet u write with the saddness in ur heart but I know wen we're talkin ur heart comes alive and ur happy.:)
I can't really express how this made me feel but it did made me sad for sure but all ur dark poetry is amazing in its own lil way I'm gonna go n comment on yer other one ok bye!
Alwayz N' Lyfe
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Re: I've Searched for so Long
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by Cancer on
Thursday, 5th February 2004 @ 01:22:20 AM AEST
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*****. i suck at commenting which is why i don't do it often, so i'll just say that i loved this. sounded like something that would've been said with a hollow sigh, yet even in the sigh, you can sense the intensity of the emotions beneath.
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Re: I've Searched for so Long
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Sunday, 8th February 2004 @ 01:07:45 AM AEST
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Oh Joel, this is so well written..The imagery is amazing!!!! I loved it...
Hope you are all right..
Hugs
Jenni |
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Re: I've Searched for so Long
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by Cobalt on
Friday, 20th February 2004 @ 07:46:56 PM AEST
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| I think this just sucked the hope out of anyone who read it. Awesome write man. It's like void of need to live. Incredible... |
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Re: I've Searched for so Long
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by CuttersAngel on
Saturday, 27th March 2004 @ 01:40:27 AM AEST
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| i've been here so many times... you've written well exactly how i feel at these times... |
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Re: I've Searched for so Long
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by Soulless on
Sunday, 4th April 2004 @ 11:10:39 PM AEST
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I enjoyed the ending how you found piece in your watery grave. Yet I hope you dont plan on commiting suicide anytime soon, just write of it. Usually letting out your emotions in poetry tames down your actions. I know it has for me in the past, i hope it does for you. I love this poem because it shares a piece of your mind and how you feel inside
kisses,
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