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Nightly Prayers
Contributed by
ShadowDaughter
on
Sunday, 25th January 2004 @ 04:47:34 PM in AEST
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every night he prayed
before he crumbled himself to sleep
"Dear God," he whispered,
"are you listening?
"it's me, God-- me.
today was okay
some bad things happened,
and I almost got scared,
but I knew you were there
watching over me,
loving me--
the only one, I'll bet--
and I smiled
and I was just fine
"and now, God,"
he murmured,
"I'd better go to sleep.
G'night, and amen."
years later, he spoke again--
"Dear God, I got angry today
I'm sorry, I know I shouldn't
but God, someone said
that You didn't exist
--didn't exist!
when here You've guided me
and helped me all my life--
and I got angry.
forgive me, God, please."
and he sighed and went to bed
some time in later years,
he got ready for bed
and said, "Dear God,
I think I'll be dying soon
I don't know how I know
but I don't think I'll be here,
talking to you, tomorrow
so God, please forgive me
for all of my sins
I love you, God
and I hope I'll see you soon
goodbye, God, and amen."
he went to sleep
the next day, there was a fire
a terrible, blazing inferno
in his apartment building
as he died, he smiled sadly
and whispered, "God . . . "
his spirit parted from his body
and floated into the dark world of death
the world of nothingness
a dark spirit smiled maliciously
at the desolation in his eyes
when he realized
it had all been just a sham.
Copyright ©
ShadowDaughter
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2004-01-25 16:47:34]
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Re: Nightly Prayers
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by hawaii06 on
Sunday, 25th January 2004 @ 04:51:09 PM AEST
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Very powerful poem...I really enjoyed reading it...
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Re: Nightly Prayers
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by Mouth on
Sunday, 25th January 2004 @ 05:30:43 PM AEST
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This is a great parable-type of poem. A man has to reckon with his beliefs after his death. The story raises an age old question; is it better to belive in somthing, even if you are ultimatly wrong, or to not belive at all? Faith is a risk, you emphasize this well here... A good title you might consider, "Faith's Reckoning".Very nice read, enjoyed it thouroughly...
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Re: Nightly Prayers
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by Kie on
Sunday, 25th January 2004 @ 05:37:00 PM AEST
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| Oh Nora where do I begin? The poem was sad but it flowed and I was absorbing each and every line. Then -POW- you hit me with the ending and I was like wow. Talk about something to think on....Lately you are just on a roll writing. I wouldn't change a thing about it. Kie |
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Re: Nightly Prayers
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by Necromant on
Monday, 26th January 2004 @ 12:33:16 PM AEST
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Oh what an unexpected ending! Great poem! a master piece!
Anne :D |
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Re: Nightly Prayers
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by Cobalt on
Friday, 20th February 2004 @ 02:04:56 AM AEST
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| Very good write. This was very nicely written. You definetly are improving. |
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Re: Nightly Prayers
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by Spazzo on
Tuesday, 12th October 2004 @ 10:47:19 PM AEST
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Sad. The last line of the last stanza just hit me like bam!
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