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rip at the heart
Contributed by
fallen_eyes
on
Sunday, 25th January 2004 @ 04:25:30 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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As I look around I see
Couples all so happy
I wish that my life could be
Like the one of him and she
Time we have spent apart
Just seems to rip at the heart
I wish for my new fresh start
I dream he would never depart
For little time do we spend
In eachothers arms to tend
To the heart we wish to mend
For my love I long to lend
As I look around I see
The couple I long to be
Your gift i wish is me
Will you soon be happy?
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fallen_eyes
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2004-01-25 16:25:30]
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Re: rip at the heart
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by hawaii06 on
Sunday, 25th January 2004 @ 04:27:03 PM AEST
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I loved this poem..It is so good and very well written...Keep writing..
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Re: rip at the heart
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by forever_lonely on
Sunday, 25th January 2004 @ 04:44:04 PM AEST
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hey tam,
this is a great pom the structure and flow goes so well together and the rhyme scheme is perfect, as for the content, im sure it will get better hun, im sure it will, or i hope it will cause you deserve it
Luke |
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Re: rip at the heart
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by Mouth on
Sunday, 25th January 2004 @ 05:32:50 PM AEST
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| Very nice flow, hope your wish comes true. Nice write, I liked it. |
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Re: rip at the heart
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by Necromant on
Monday, 26th January 2004 @ 12:30:59 PM AEST
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Oh great poem! Hope you get what you want and soon!
Anne :D |
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Re: rip at the heart
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by Cobalt on
Friday, 20th February 2004 @ 02:02:47 AM AEST
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| Nice write. Very heartfelt. Hopefully you'll get to spend more time with them.. |
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Re: rip at the heart
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 6th March 2011 @ 11:00:38 AM AEST
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| the title matches this poem perfectly, good work |
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