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Where is my Mind
Contributed by
alecfernadez
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Sunday, 25th January 2004 @ 08:20:13 AM in AEST
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Windows breaking in my mind,
Shattered glass stabs my conscience,
Fate grabs me from behind,
The bricks are still filled with nonsense,
Talking, separating from the wall,
Clarity ensures I know I’m losing my mind
Already half way to the gutter,
Fell down, I can’t get up again,
Inside my thoughts I mutter,
Nothing will ever be the same,
Now that I’ve lost almost everything,
Everything that meant something,
Replaced with only nothing,
My mind’s to hollow,
The grave which I dug,
Isn’t way near big enough,
To fit both myself and my self-esteem,
My battered conscience and shattered dreams,
This material life is the coating cream,
Of a pie so big, vile and over date,
That I might as well laugh and accept my fate
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Re: Where is my Mind
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by AbstractMinded on
Sunday, 25th January 2004 @ 08:23:18 AM AEST
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| Great write, felt like looking into your mind. Good stuff. |
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Re: Where is my Mind
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Sunday, 25th January 2004 @ 11:29:14 AM AEST
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Wow...this is great!! Loved the metaphors used here..... Keep them coming...
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Re: Where is my Mind
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by hawaii06 on
Sunday, 25th January 2004 @ 03:43:39 PM AEST
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Very good poem...Keep on writing...
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Re: Where is my Mind
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by deathdrop on
Tuesday, 27th January 2004 @ 07:39:57 AM AEST
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| this is soo good, you are soo young, if you are thinking of doing some thing to your-self you mustn't get a job in the music industry, and earn what you deserve! |
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Re: Where is my Mind
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by deathdrop on
Tuesday, 27th January 2004 @ 07:40:56 AM AEST
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this is soo good, you are so young, if you are thinking of doing some thing to your-self you mustn't,
get a job in the music industry, and earn what you deserve! |
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Re: Where is my Mind
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by Cobalt on
Friday, 20th February 2004 @ 12:24:40 AM AEST
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| This was nicely twisted. You write really well like this. |
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