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Daddy's Slave
Contributed by
lostinlimbo
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Saturday, 24th January 2004 @ 04:13:14 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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Hush little baby, don't say a word
Daddy's said to me before he made me hurt
Physical but mostly mental; he broke my heart
I still don't understand what I did to make him start
He was my Daddy and I loved him so dear
Then one day he became the man that I fear
The lock on the door; the old brown sheets
The promises unkept; his grip unforgiving and me so weak
Every bruise so dark but I managed to hide them well
And even though I knew I should; I never did tell
Because I loved him as my Father and I didn't want to see him in pain
I just wish to this very day that he would have felt the same
But he was intent on ruining me; leaving all these scars
And die of old age never ceasing my mental wars
So I sit writing this; my note of final word
And I look over my escapes, with vision so blurred
Will it be the knife, gun or noose? Oh wait, my eyes are growing heavy
My last sight is the bottles that are so empty
And my dying thought is that of him in his grave
Before I leave this world... no longer Daddy's slave
Copyright ©
lostinlimbo
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2004-01-24 16:13:14]
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Re: Daddy's Slave
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Saturday, 24th January 2004 @ 05:05:50 PM AEST
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OMG!! How can anyone be offended by this write! It reflects a life that many young people face. Very well done....
Jenni |
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Re: Daddy's Slave
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by Stalkee on
Saturday, 24th January 2004 @ 06:27:33 PM AEST
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| wow... |
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Re: Daddy's Slave
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by CuttersAngel on
Saturday, 24th January 2004 @ 08:12:37 PM AEST
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| This is a very true part of reality. You have a talent that I hold as well...being able to write about such a dark part of society withough having to experience it. This is unbelievable!! I don't know what else to say other than words can't say/describe/explain the greatness of this work. |
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Re: Daddy's Slave
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by KittyVamp on
Sunday, 25th January 2004 @ 04:11:55 AM AEST
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| The fact that you are male simply makes this work more meaningful.. in my eyes anyway... This is truly a work of art.. and it really hits home with me. |
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Re: Daddy's Slave
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by brandywyne on
Monday, 26th January 2004 @ 09:55:47 AM AEST
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wow....good writing
scary thought but unfourtanetly a reality of what can happen behind closed doors. |
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Re: Daddy's Slave
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by pain_and_tears on
Monday, 26th January 2004 @ 04:31:50 PM AEST
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| Wow that brought me to tears. I hope you really didn't die. |
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Re: Daddy's Slave
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by RochelleLloyd on
Monday, 26th January 2004 @ 11:48:50 PM AEST
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| not offended at all... wonderfully written |
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Re: Daddy's Slave
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by Tautscher27 on
Tuesday, 27th January 2004 @ 09:39:36 PM AEST
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| That is truley an amazing poem...it really touched me because its almost like you have been there. i feel that pain everynight and you just took the words out of my mouth. Truley amazing. Keep writing |
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Re: Daddy's Slave
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by Cobalt on
Wednesday, 18th February 2004 @ 06:08:25 PM AEST
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| Oh owww. I know I've been close to seeing that last sight. This was very powerful to me. I liked it. |
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Re: Daddy's Slave
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by BrokenHeartedLass on
Sunday, 14th March 2004 @ 02:14:33 AM AEST
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| Your work is touching. You are a very special person who was blessed with a wonderful insight. I know how it feels to be daddy's slave and I believe you have captured those feelings quite well. You are a blessing. |
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