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One last black rose (Save me from myself tonight)
Contributed by
Cobalt
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Friday, 23rd January 2004 @ 12:22:53 AM in AEST
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In a secret place
I die again.
Stab this blade
Through my heart again.
I heard your words
All too well this time.
Breaking in my head
The voices begin to rise.
Poisoned soul and
I, I slit my wrists
On this lonely night.
You said, you said.
It’s coming back
Again tonight.
For all the nights
Spent crying in a corner.
There can be no
Dawn for me.
No, I’m too far gone.
Yeah, giving up tonight.
No more scars this time.
Can’t heal when you’re dead.
No more lies this time.
Won’t hear them when I’m gone.
Take my life away
From all I’ve ever known.
Save me from myself
Tonight and hold me
In your arms for life.
The faulty phoenix
Copyright ©
Cobalt
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2004-01-23 00:22:53]
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Re: One last black rose (Save me from myself tonight)
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by bobotheclown on
Friday, 23rd January 2004 @ 12:25:19 AM AEST
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'Songy'? The word songy does not come to mind however this was friggin awesome and I loved the rhythm of it. Very sad and melancholy loved it all.
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Re: One last black rose (Save me from myself tonight)
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by venkat on
Friday, 23rd January 2004 @ 01:01:00 AM AEST
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| As always a thoroughly enjoyable read..venkat |
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Re: One last black rose (Save me from myself tonight)
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by Jolly on
Friday, 23rd January 2004 @ 01:33:33 AM AEST
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| why so morbid? Is that your trademark? As I look through this site...there is so much that is dark, violent and suicidal. Frankly alllthough it is good, I would like to see some light hearted subject matter. Must be too much of a challence with a heavy name like cobalt. A nice white rose, or a pretty white gardenia, some warm oil, heated and a nice massage...I'd save you from your self for myself LOL. Let's see you fall in love, be happy and go on a picnic...take her hair down, watch it cascade down her shoulders..touch it..twirl it round your finger..touch it to your lips...um um. |
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Re: One last black rose (Save me from myself tonight)
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by mercedes on
Friday, 23rd January 2004 @ 11:18:46 AM AEST
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| I guess Jolly hasnt read your "lighter" ones yet. As always, good write Jeff. |
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Re: One last black rose (Save me from myself tonight)
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Friday, 23rd January 2004 @ 11:29:31 AM AEST
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Wow.... very dark, very well written.... umm I'm hoping this is just poetry....
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Re: One last black rose (Save me from myself tonight)
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 23rd January 2004 @ 02:04:09 PM AEST
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Beautiful loved every word of it. Jopefull yi will find time to read your other poems!
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Re: One last black rose (Save me from myself tonight)
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 23rd January 2004 @ 02:04:30 PM AEST
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Beautiful loved every word of it. hopefully i will find time to read your other poems!
Amy~Cryingonmyporch |
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Re: One last black rose (Save me from myself tonight)
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by afraid_of_fear on
Friday, 23rd January 2004 @ 03:36:21 PM AEST
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this is great.. glad u left the last stanza as it is..
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Re: One last black rose (Save me from myself tonight)
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by forever_lonely on
Friday, 23rd January 2004 @ 08:49:26 PM AEST
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An amazing poem
Very heart bearing, full of emoiton infact full of everything that makes this a masterpeice
i too hope this is just poetry :)
all the best
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Re: One last black rose (Save me from myself tonight)
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by Kie on
Friday, 23rd January 2004 @ 08:56:42 PM AEST
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| Leave it as it is, it closes perfectly. Great write! Kie |
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Re: One last black rose (Save me from myself tonight)
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by MoonlitAngel on
Saturday, 24th January 2004 @ 07:35:10 PM AEST
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Beautiful words! I think it's awesome just the way it is, although I do love that last stanza and it would make an awesome chorus... I dunno. I just think this is beautiful.
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Re: One last black rose (Save me from myself tonight)
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by Dawny on
Sunday, 25th January 2004 @ 06:58:19 AM AEST
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I agree, leave it as it is. This is brilliant, very moving. I will definately be reading more of your poetry.
Love Dawny x |
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Re: One last black rose (Save me from myself tonight)
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by Necromant on
Thursday, 29th January 2004 @ 08:16:02 PM AEST
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Its the fourth time I read this poem and I always end this poem feeling very sad. It has a lot of pain in it, its almost palpable. The wording is shattering very deep. Amazing writing, I had to log in to leave a comment, wasn't supposed to login today but this poem urged me to leave a comment. Written with much pain hope this poem is part of your past not present.
Anne :D |
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