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When you left
Contributed by
loopylou
on
Sunday, 18th January 2004 @ 10:15:17 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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Eyelids closing in on my eyes
I'm so tired
mind wide awake
heart pauses and aches
alarm clock shakes
i haven't slept
stayed up all night and wept
on my own
hoping to here the ringing of the phone
no luck
I suppose I'm just not enough
never a moment in my head that doesn't include you
I wish this pain you hadn't put me through
but you did leave
you left when you were the only thing I need
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2004-01-18 10:15:17]
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Re: When you left
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by TheSchroedmeister on
Sunday, 18th January 2004 @ 05:44:35 PM AEST
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| God, I've been there before. Thanks for the write. |
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Re: When you left
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by eternal_sorrows on
Sunday, 18th January 2004 @ 06:28:25 PM AEST
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Grief in any form hurts. The person you love gone for a life time, I whope you can write your feelings out. Great emotional write.
Wishing you a gentle healing.
ES |
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Re: When you left
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 18th January 2004 @ 07:15:08 PM AEST
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| (((((loopylou))))) hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: When you left
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by Kie on
Sunday, 18th January 2004 @ 10:49:20 PM AEST
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I am still struggling with being there. Haven't overcame it yet. It hurts, I know it does. Hang in there, thats what I do. Your poem was a very strong emotional write.
Kie |
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Re: When you left
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by Cobalt on
Thursday, 5th February 2004 @ 02:06:59 AM AEST
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Wow this was well written. I think it was perfectly expressed.
'I suppose I'm just not enough
never a moment in my head that doesn't include you
I wish this pain you hadn't put me through'
This was a very powerful line. I'm sure you are more than enough. We guys are famous for doing stupid things and leaving the ones we love. I hope you make it through this. |
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