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I Am Invisible
Contributed by
Merry
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Saturday, 17th January 2004 @ 03:23:42 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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my own invisibility defies me
such clarity outlined
by the trace of your kiss
then gone
disappeared
I cannot see me
nobody sees me here
or there or anywhere
blended into the background
without you to sustain me
blush me with life's colors
blooming bright
I disappear
invisible behind tears
falling silver curtain
blocks the light
all color washes away
dripping from your fingertips
red remorse
green jealousy, blue sadness
yellow sunshine and happiness
I turn as pale as moonlight
a shadow of memory
2:41 PM 1/17/2004 gmm
Copyright ©
Merry
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2004-01-17 15:23:42]
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Re: I Am Invisible
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by Necromant on
Saturday, 17th January 2004 @ 03:34:50 PM AEST
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Oh so sad & bitter! This poem is great! It has such imagery that makes you feel your pain! Great write!
Anne :D |
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Re: I Am Invisible
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by lostinmyself on
Saturday, 17th January 2004 @ 03:38:42 PM AEST
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| this is so sad. it makes me feel unhappy. ive felt like this before...its not very nice. this is a great write, i can really tell the feelings put into this. keep up the good work, luv phil xx |
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Re: I Am Invisible
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 17th January 2004 @ 03:50:37 PM AEST
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| yes i do, ...so real within' the moment then *poof*... your poem is a rush of feelings expressed wonderfully, how often i have felt this way myself, subperb writing as i have come to love in your poetry:) hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: I Am Invisible
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by Jellybellyprincess on
Saturday, 17th January 2004 @ 04:08:34 PM AEST
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Amazing..... I can totally feel the emotion...... fave line-- "blush me with life's colors". That line just stuck out in my mind. Amazing write Merry =)
God bless,
Ellen |
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Re: I Am Invisible
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by Kie on
Saturday, 17th January 2004 @ 04:33:59 PM AEST
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| Your words are so beautiful. The pictures you placed in my mind were heavenly. You write really well. Kie |
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Re: I Am Invisible
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by Rakerman1999 on
Saturday, 17th January 2004 @ 04:52:44 PM AEST
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Your writing is a thing of poetic perfection Gaille. Some have the magic in their pen, you are one of them. I never tire of reading your writes.
Roses,
Larry |
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Re: I Am Invisible
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by DreamWeaver on
Saturday, 17th January 2004 @ 06:59:24 PM AEST
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| Wonderful imagery ... simply beautiful ... Jan |
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Re: I Am Invisible
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by shelby on
Saturday, 17th January 2004 @ 09:50:29 PM AEST
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Im at a loss for words this is great!Yes I can relate to this as well.
michelle |
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Re: I Am Invisible
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by Cobalt on
Tuesday, 3rd February 2004 @ 03:07:17 PM AEST
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| I really liked the end of it. How you assigned the colors. I like the whole thing but that part was really cool. I'm not sure if I followed this like I should have. Good write though. |
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