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Death of Love
Contributed by
stalkee
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Saturday, 17th January 2004 @ 01:54:06 PM in AEST
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Hid away, couldn't say
What's been running through my mind
Blown away, can't explain
How you make me feel each time
Hard to believe in what you've never had
And for me I've never had love
Hard to believe in what's made you sad
By the way, couldn't say
How you make me feel each day
My silence is what haunts my days
My silence is what makes me frown
My silence is what makes me dazed
And my silence is what's breaking me down
Hid away, couldn't say
What's been running through my mind
Blown away, can't explain
How you make me feel each time
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Re: Death of Love
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 17th January 2004 @ 02:28:00 PM AEST
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| wow! this is great! i know you listed it as sad but re-read it, it is a very romantic and beautiful poem, one of your best! love it:) hugs n' nessa |
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Re: Death of Love
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Saturday, 17th January 2004 @ 04:12:32 PM AEST
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Just a little suggestion... hope you don't mind....
"By the way, couldn't say
How much you make me feel each day"
that seems a little awkward. if you took that out the poem would flow alot better....
Good write though... |
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Re: Death of Love
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by Rakerman1999 on
Monday, 19th January 2004 @ 11:42:21 PM AEST
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Well done :o)
Larry |
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Re: Death of Love
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by Cobalt on
Tuesday, 3rd February 2004 @ 11:25:18 AM AEST
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I dunno... I loved this part thoug:
'My silence is what haunts my days
My silence is what makes me frown
My silence is what makes me dazed
And my silence is what's breaking me down'
The chorus type thing isn't too bad. All in all I'd have to say it was a very good write. |
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