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The Last Sonata
Contributed by
Vitreous_Soul
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Saturday, 17th January 2004 @ 05:16:48 AM in AEST
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Folded and forgotten for years
Between the pages of a book unread
Carelessly left, burned with tears
Places where the ink had bled
Slowly opened, what lies before
Perplexed to see a clef and notes
No last words, just a musical score
Around this staff emotions float
Lying in the corner, a cob-webbed guitar
That's somehow perfectly in tune
Strumming a chord, playing the first bar
Remembering this hidden rune
Eyes draw closed, lost in the melody
How much pain could this song mend
Playing this music may set him free
To give closure, to give an end
I feel the thoughts he held within
Visions of love and all things good
Even in sadness he could not win
I cried for him when no one would
So much love woven in every measure
A soul pierced by solitude's lance
A heart of gold, now buried treasure
In death harmony, in life discordance
The final movement played so slow
A bitter farewell to who I was before
Fitting end, a fading arpeggio
Last note to close that chapter forevermore
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Re: The Last Sonata
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by emystar on
Saturday, 17th January 2004 @ 05:23:18 AM AEST
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Good work.
it's sad but beautifull at the same time.
awesome writing!
peace, joy, luv, huggs,
emy
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Re: The Last Sonata
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by EmSal on
Saturday, 17th January 2004 @ 06:00:32 AM AEST
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Wow I truly liked this write. "How much pain could this song mend" - how this line just speaks to me. The whole write speaks to me, I feel this. Excellent write. All the best.
Emma.
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Re: The Last Sonata
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by venkat on
Saturday, 17th January 2004 @ 06:44:22 AM AEST
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"A heart of gold, now buried treasure
In death harmony, in life discordance
The final movement played so slow "
great lines.. absolutely beautiful.
venkat
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Re: The Last Sonata
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by Jacktripper on
Saturday, 17th January 2004 @ 07:34:55 AM AEST
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| What an excellent choice of words to describe emotions. "folded and forgotten between the pages of a book unread." The rhyme scheme is also impressive. The poem is written in a sonata it has classical movement and the words of music. Well done looking forward to seeing more. |
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Re: The Last Sonata
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by Wrybod on
Saturday, 17th January 2004 @ 07:46:51 AM AEST
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i have to hand it to you this was poignant beyond measure. I tried to put this over in my poem "The way we were" but didn't quite get it as well as this.
bob |
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Re: The Last Sonata
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by Necromant on
Saturday, 17th January 2004 @ 08:58:08 AM AEST
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This one is Beautiful! Its very touching and bit sad but also sweet. Great write!
Anne :D |
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Re: The Last Sonata
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by sweetangeluk on
Saturday, 17th January 2004 @ 10:00:29 AM AEST
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So glad I came across your poem
Beautiful is the word to describe the feelings and emotion in this poem
I was there by the old cobwebbed guitar Could visualise it all through your words Thank you for taking me there
Truly wonderful
Love Angelxxx |
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Re: The Last Sonata
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by DreamWeaver on
Saturday, 17th January 2004 @ 07:13:52 PM AEST
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| A masterpiece of poetry ... such beautiful words and written with a clever pen ... Jan |
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Re: The Last Sonata
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by forever_lonely on
Saturday, 17th January 2004 @ 07:18:28 PM AEST
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v.s
Now this is why i love poetry,
'The final movement played so slow
A bitter farewell to who I was before
Fitting end, a fading arpeggio
Last note to close that chapter forevermore'
those words are so perfect,
this write portrays your talent in its most perfect form
Everything about this, the flow, the rhyme scheme, the choice of words everything
you have really progressed and thrown yourself into an amazing state of pure poetry of late and this, this is just the tip of the iceberg
An amazing write v.s please please keep them up
all the best
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Re: The Last Sonata
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by Kie on
Monday, 19th January 2004 @ 12:27:55 PM AEST
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You made me cry, I tried not to. Where are the words when I need them?
"I feel the thoughts he held within
Visions of love and all things good
Even in sadness he could not win
I cried for him when no one would"
Those four lines got to me, I certainly could relate. So many thoughts going thru my mind and I think I will not share them and just say that connection is a mysterious thing.
Kie
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Re: The Last Sonata
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by lovingcritters on
Tuesday, 20th January 2004 @ 10:58:11 AM AEST
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Dear VS
This was simply lovely.....I could hear your strumming, and humming, didn't quite make out the end.......because that was only yours to tend!
What beautiful poetry you write my friend
Lovingcritters
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Re: The Last Sonata
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by ladyfawn on
Wednesday, 21st January 2004 @ 06:56:55 AM AEST
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| breathtakingly beautiful:) hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: The Last Sonata
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by Eve on
Wednesday, 21st January 2004 @ 03:39:21 PM AEST
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Gorgeous. And I'd type more if it weren't for my eyes being so blurry...
Keep writing,
-Eve. |
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Re: The Last Sonata
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by Cobalt on
Tuesday, 3rd February 2004 @ 01:41:45 AM AEST
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| Oh wow. I can't even explain how that hit me. It was excellent V.S. Very friggin' excellent. |
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Re: The Last Sonata
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 23rd February 2004 @ 06:37:05 PM AEST
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Hmn. I now see why this one was pointed out to me. I'm working backwards from 'My Angel', and I definately prefer this one, even though they're both equally as bright stars in the YPDC sky.
You know I like stargazing? - I could sit staring at this one all night long . . . and yet . . . I still must read on. |
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Re: The Last Sonata
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by Joan on
Tuesday, 30th March 2004 @ 09:45:59 AM AEST
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| how beautiful written..with musical word here and there...you must love music.. |
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Re: The Last Sonata
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 23rd April 2004 @ 04:37:40 AM AEST
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*long, deep, sigh*
Forget Demetrius. He may well write things which are technically astounding to like minds . . . but he doesn't bring tears to my eyes.
Still, to date, the best emotive and resonant poem in here for me. |
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Re: The Last Sonata
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by Stitch on
Tuesday, 4th May 2004 @ 08:29:42 AM AEST
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I lived in memories for so long. They were my only solace in times of total chaos. This is beautiful. I think you will let go. I think you will move on, but I know it can take a very long time to heal.
Stitch |
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Re: The Last Sonata
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 24th November 2004 @ 03:47:51 PM AEST
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Back again.
. . .
"Fitting end, a fading arpeggio"
That still resonates as powerfully as it did all those months back.
Inspiring. |
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