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Don't Leave
Contributed by
sweetpeall
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Saturday, 17th January 2004 @ 01:57:42 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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I sit here listening to the rain
feeling all this pain
remember the day
I thought you'd never go away
now I wish so hard you would of stayed
but I should have paid attention to you
now I sit here feeling blue
because I have no clue what to do
please don't leave
if you do I'll have no reason to live
all my love to give
just don't leave me here
listening to the rain
feeling all this pain
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2004-01-17 01:57:42]
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Re: Don't Leave
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by EmSal on
Saturday, 17th January 2004 @ 06:04:31 AM AEST
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Yes missing someone can hurt so bad. Knowing that they need to leave can hurt so bad, they must be hurting too though. Good write, I know of this frustrating, agonising, painful feeling. To be left behind by someone so dear, who gave you reason to breathe, let them know how you feel. Whatever the reason they want to leave, give it good thought and don't act lightly upon your decisions. Take care and all the best.
Emma. |
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Re: Don't Leave
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by Jacktripper on
Saturday, 17th January 2004 @ 07:27:23 AM AEST
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| Your headed in the right direction with this poem and it has a great intro," sit here listening to the rain." But we want more about the cause and the reaction. What was the day January 16th at 9:00 at Starbucks at the movies? Bring reality into the poem so the reader can become more addcited to the poetry. The words are strong with emotion, all you need is the cause which has it's own emotion. Well done your on you way. |
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Re: Don't Leave
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by Cobalt on
Monday, 2nd February 2004 @ 03:56:35 PM AEST
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| NIce write. I enjoyed it. Seems very heartfelt. |
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