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Spilled Milk
Contributed by
manicmuze
on
Friday, 16th January 2004 @ 11:23:30 AM in AEST
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i watch her love my father
and i see him
allow her
differently, than the way
he let me watch him read
or stand near the edge of the driveway
as he laid fresh blacktop each summer
with a huge broom
made to sweep things
under other things or out of the way
i hear her say "i love you daddy"
and i listen, as my thirty-year old echo
runs in through the back screen door
and stands at attention in the kitchen
—hopeful
and a voice i'd know any time
responds
—out loud, unbridled,
as if those words came naturally
—too.
"i love you too"
free flowing
and all my little girl hope
and dreams
spill into this
her hand snug in his
—second chances
a puddle on the kitchen floor
Copyright ©
manicmuze
... [
2004-01-16 11:23:30]
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Re: Spilled Milk
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by Putteragain on
Friday, 16th January 2004 @ 12:16:20 PM AEST
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this was so cool the feelings of rememberance took me to that kitchen and i was there with you that dosent happen much will keep you on my top reading list
thanks
michelle |
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Re: Spilled Milk
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by ladyfawn on
Friday, 16th January 2004 @ 12:23:16 PM AEST
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| excellent, beautifully written:) hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Spilled Milk
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by bernard on
Friday, 16th January 2004 @ 01:21:25 PM AEST
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| Great it made a change to the run of the mill poems. The best line right at the end. A puddle on the floor. I seem to remember that kitchen,I was three years old at the time of my puddle on the floor. Thanks for taking me back so many years. Have a great day now from bernard. |
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Re: Spilled Milk
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by Necromant on
Friday, 16th January 2004 @ 01:51:51 PM AEST
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Awww what a beautiful poem!! I wish i can remember that time! Amazing writing
Anne :D |
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Re: Spilled Milk
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by alecfernadez on
Friday, 16th January 2004 @ 01:55:26 PM AEST
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| this is a great poem, both visual and integuin, keep up the great work |
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Re: Spilled Milk
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by scott_milton on
Wednesday, 21st January 2004 @ 05:31:32 AM AEST
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| amazing write. |
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Re: Spilled Milk
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by Cobalt on
Friday, 30th January 2004 @ 10:22:26 AM AEST
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| This was really cool. I think you did an excellent job with this one. Very nice. |
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