|
 Menu
|
|
|
|
|
Social
|
|
|
|
|
Change
Contributed by
Necromant
on
Thursday, 15th January 2004 @ 05:25:40 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
|
“In life we have to change
We have to start growing,
We have to start being mature,
We get to know more people,
But we have to forget about the others,
We have to loose our innocence.
We have to change our costume,
From the guiltless little child
To the fragile old man,
In our life we will change
Our costume for many times,
For how long will we need to change?
I know this poem sucks but wanted to post it anyway :P
Copyright ©
Necromant
... [
2004-01-15 17:25:40]
(Date/Time posted on
site)
Advertisments:
|
|
|
|
|
|
Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more
|
|
All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry
Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any
comment.
That said, if you find an offensive comment, please
contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title
etc.
|
|
|
Re: Change
(User Rating: 1 )
by mystERA on
Thursday, 15th January 2004 @ 05:57:25 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
WOW!
whom doesnt change affect?? i think that this poem grabs all those thoughts that a growing teenager thinks about!
And this is not only about teenagers! but even aimed for us....it helped me remember what i went through |
|
|
Re: Change
(User Rating: 1 )
by forever_lonely on
Thursday, 15th January 2004 @ 06:16:52 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
This is such an awesome poem really put into perspective what us teenagers have to go through,
you really know how to touch out to us anne you have such an amazing talent and ths poem really shows how great you are at writing
all the best
Luke |
|
|
Re: Change
(User Rating: 1 )
by WordPoet on
Thursday, 15th January 2004 @ 06:27:14 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Poetry comes from within and paints a picture for others to see. How you paint that picture is your choice. Never be sorry for what you write, it is a part of who you are and you're willing to share makes you an artist in my eyes.
Besides, I liked it... |
|
|
Re: Change
(User Rating: 1 )
by Manicmuze on
Thursday, 15th January 2004 @ 07:04:18 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
We're always changing... evolving, transforming into who we'll be tomorrow. Life is one lesson after another, and i doubt we'll ever have all the answers.
Good poem, enjoyed this,
~ Wendy |
|
|
Re: Change
(User Rating: 1 )
by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Thursday, 15th January 2004 @ 09:12:57 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Awesome write, Anne.. Even this ole gal can relate...
Hugs
Jenni |
|
|
Re: Change
(User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on
Friday, 16th January 2004 @ 01:36:46 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
I like this poem. An excellent question without a standard answer--the poem conveyed your thoughts well--it doesn't suck like you think it does.
Well, it's not too odd a thing to for me to notice when one considers I'm transgender, but I noticed a lack of parallelism in a pair of lines...
"From the guiltless little child
To the fragile old man,"
To clean this up, the term "boy" could have been paired with "old man," or "child" could have been paired up with "old person" (...or perhaps "old fart?"--hee-hee! Hmm. Thinking about it, "old fart" actually would fit when one considers that being an old fart usually means one is resistant to change.).
Anyway, getting back to a serious note, using gender nuetral or gender specific words consistantly would have made the lines "parallel."
I know, I know, you wrote this when you were fourteen... I'm being pretty picky in my comments to a fourteen year old version of you! Just food for thought though--Mighty good poem anyway! |
|
|
Re: Change
(User Rating: 1 )
by venkat on
Friday, 16th January 2004 @ 07:08:03 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
change is the law of life..interesting read
venkat |
|
|
Re: Change
(User Rating: 1 )
by Cobalt on
Thursday, 29th January 2004 @ 12:26:03 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| Sorry hon this didn't exactly suck. In fact it was rather good. Your style has just gotten better so you think it sucked. It was a good write and held the truth about things. |
|
|
Re: Change
(User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on
Sunday, 14th March 2004 @ 08:21:50 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Very interesting poem. I found it brought back memories of my teenage years . . . and a same kind of anxiety.
Good write.
Not sucky. |
|
|
Re: Change
(User Rating: 1 )
by Hurretje on
Monday, 29th March 2004 @ 01:45:30 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Well this poem doesn't suck at all. It envelopes a very important question in it. I think it is a good thing to think about things first before indiscriminately accepting it.
Good work!
Hur |
|
|
|
· 
Poetry
Community
Members
Areas
Reference
Search
Top
Others
