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Seventh Heaven
Contributed by
manicmuze
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Tuesday, 13th January 2004 @ 01:14:29 PM in AEST
Topic:
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You could have me
If your breath were close enough
To warm my neck, test my water
Lap the depths of me
With hungry licks and slow caresses
Tickles up my spine
I would slide upon you
Completely inspired
Entwined around
The sound of your breathing
Almost heaving
Pressed and meshed
We are skinless
In the movement
Of one rhythm
As it enters us
As you enter me
And I let you see
Beyond the fiery green
Of my eyes
Where my temperature rises
Deep inside
Where I’m wet and wild
Wanting you
To touch everything
Fingertips along my seams
Trace my dreams
With your lips
Our hips in unison
I am rocking to your music
Giving in to your song
The long strong strokes
The slips and glides
As the notes play me
To seventh heaven
To ecstasy
To blissful sighs
You’re strumming my hair
And I’m humming within
Spooned and sleepy
—Yet more alive
Than I’ve ever been
Copyright ©
manicmuze
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2004-01-13 13:14:29]
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Re: Seventh Heaven
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by alecfernadez on
Tuesday, 13th January 2004 @ 01:17:32 PM AEST
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This is really erotic... Its also very passionate, and I like the way you show that in the poem, and it turns out great. Its very erotic...
Keep up the good work!
Alec Fernandez
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Re: Seventh Heaven
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by Rakerman1999 on
Tuesday, 13th January 2004 @ 01:55:16 PM AEST
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mmmm mmmm hot enough to melt the snow outside ;o)
Beautiful
Larry |
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Re: Seventh Heaven
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by DreamWeaver on
Tuesday, 13th January 2004 @ 03:22:10 PM AEST
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| Gorgeous write ... sensuous and delightful ... Jan |
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Re: Seventh Heaven
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by Solmyr1404 on
Tuesday, 13th January 2004 @ 03:43:20 PM AEST
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| very good. i liked it |
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Re: Seventh Heaven
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by shelby on
Tuesday, 13th January 2004 @ 04:24:48 PM AEST
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ahhhhhhhhhh steamy
michelle |
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Re: Seventh Heaven
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by norticus on
Wednesday, 14th January 2004 @ 11:39:58 AM AEST
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Aroused! That's what effect this poem had on me. This poem was deep and musical and surprisingly sexy in a way that most poems related to sex rarely are. The tempo is something I enjoyed here too.
I give this a 5 on the Nortiscale.
norticus |
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Re: Seventh Heaven
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by whisper-of-night on
Monday, 19th January 2004 @ 09:35:21 AM AEST
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(*stammering*) ohhhh..... mama....... help me..... shower!... Where is the cold shower?!........ I need..... to cool....... cool down........ (*half hour later......*)
Huuuuh, much better! Oh girl, this is the most sexy and erotic poem (note- not 'one of'!) I ever read! Damn! Where are you, I be come running! ^_^ Hehe, keep more coming! |
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Re: Seventh Heaven
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by Cobalt on
Friday, 23rd January 2004 @ 05:35:41 PM AEST
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| Nice... Nice... Very good. Ummm... I.. That was really good. I think my imagination just ran away... Bad... Lol. Great write. |
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