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A Place
Contributed by
alecfernadez
on
Monday, 12th January 2004 @ 04:02:04 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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I see the lights of the dawn,
I hear the cries of the early fawn,
And I wonder what I'm doing here,
Afraid, cold, naked and filled with fear
Its something that I cant understand,
Its something that I cant defend,
I dont know where I am,
I cant get out, but I know I can
I ripp open my chest, and tear my heart out,
And I wonder what the blood is about,
I look at my beating heart,
It stops beating, beat it to start
I cry as blood flows from my eyes,
As I look at the multi colored skies,
And I stop breathing and wonder why,
Why in this dark place I have to hide...
Copyright ©
alecfernadez
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2004-01-12 16:02:04]
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Re: A Place
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by Necromant on
Monday, 12th January 2004 @ 06:42:37 PM AEST
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Whoa! Great writing! This one is really touching! So sad to see no comments. The poem is very tragic. And your poems don't suck! Don't throw your self away you have talent! Keep writing never give up :D
Anne :) |
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Re: A Place
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by Kie on
Monday, 12th January 2004 @ 08:45:34 PM AEST
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Dark & tragic, but filled with an emotion that cries out to the reader. Well done-
Kie |
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Re: A Place
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by Cobalt on
Thursday, 22nd January 2004 @ 01:29:03 PM AEST
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| Now that one definetly had power to it. I really liked how you wrote this. It was damn good. |
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