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Puddle of Blood
Contributed by
Kirby
on
Sunday, 11th January 2004 @ 07:10:55 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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Twinkle twinkle little blade
Oh...what an escapade.
Slicing and diceing
Here and there
Blood and flesh be everywhere.
Up the dark filled road she goes
Blood and tears still harmfully flows
To the place where they first kissed
She lays down to wait for eternal bliss.
If anyone shall ask her why
She'd just say,"It was about a guy."
A guy she loved with all her heart
A huge heart that he tore apart.
Now as the rain is pouring down
Her eyes close one last time
A smile is left on her face.
As a blood river puddles at his driveway
Leading him to the only girl that has ever loved him.
Copyright ©
Kirby
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2004-01-11 19:10:55]
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Re: Puddle of Blood
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by driping_blood on
Sunday, 11th January 2004 @ 09:05:01 PM AEST
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i like it nice work
i dont now what ells to say so i wont |
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Re: Puddle of Blood
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by mercedes on
Sunday, 11th January 2004 @ 10:22:24 PM AEST
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| No guy alone is worth dying for but its well written. |
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Re: Puddle of Blood
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by MoonlitAngel on
Monday, 12th January 2004 @ 01:02:48 AM AEST
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I couldn't help but laugh at the beginning... and by the end I was like, whoa.. that's intense... so great write! Love the emotion, it just jumps off the computer screen and swallows you whole.
~ Moonlit |
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Re: Puddle of Blood
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by Cobalt on
Wednesday, 21st January 2004 @ 10:26:17 AM AEST
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| Honestly I liked this one but I hope you aren't going to do that. I liked the idea behind it. Very nice. |
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