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Flickering flame
Contributed by
forever_lonely
on
Sunday, 11th January 2004 @ 06:54:06 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Standing alone in the cold
Looking forth to what this beholds
A flickering flame of broken lust
A silent scream of once gained trust
A lonely heart, times true friend
This be a letter, i have to send
Remember your word, god please dont break
i feel my faith, shatter and shake
I walked along the lines of love
We spread our wings like turtle doves
I lost my balance and fell away
These broken dreams of yesterday
So now i stand here in the cold
Knowing what love doth behold
My flickering flame of once true lust
Had just blown away, and turned to dust...
Thankyou my lust
You made me so strong
Copyright ©
forever_lonely
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2004-01-11 18:54:06]
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Re: Flickering flame
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by Empty_Soul on
Sunday, 11th January 2004 @ 06:57:14 PM AEST
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wow! this poem is truely amazing luke, great example of your master of language truely beautiful!
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Re: Flickering flame
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by Necromant on
Sunday, 11th January 2004 @ 06:59:05 PM AEST
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The more I read it, the more I love it! Very touching, deep, emotional and the ending is really great. 'You made me strong' Yes thats the attitude to life! Great amazing writing. Very talented. Write more!!
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Re: Flickering flame
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by emystar on
Sunday, 11th January 2004 @ 07:07:29 PM AEST
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A little sad but very good writing.
Keep up the good work!
peace, joy, luv, huggs,
emy |
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Re: Flickering flame
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 11th January 2004 @ 07:45:43 PM AEST
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An exquisite piece of poetry. Reminiscent of the old masters. It brings images of autumn, marmalade and pinecones. Keep up the good work.
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Re: Flickering flame
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by Vitreous_Soul on
Sunday, 11th January 2004 @ 10:42:33 PM AEST
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"My flickering flame of once true lust
Had just blown away, and turned to dust..."
Lines like these are why I love poetry. Simply masterful.
Truly,
-V.S.
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Re: Flickering flame
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by shelby on
Monday, 12th January 2004 @ 02:05:12 AM AEST
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awesome! vivid details of the candle flames as well took me a step back in time here almost gave me chills!!!!!!!
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Re: Flickering flame
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by Ilhar on
Monday, 12th January 2004 @ 07:40:13 AM AEST
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vivid imagery...draws the reader in ...very good i like this i think my favorite
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Re: Flickering flame
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by Kie on
Monday, 12th January 2004 @ 06:08:34 PM AEST
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This is my absolute favorite poem by you so far. Remarkable, poetic, everything perfect.
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