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BOREDOM!
Contributed by
Empty_Soul
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Sunday, 11th January 2004 @ 05:20:48 PM in AEST
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I am so bored as I sit here and write
I am trying to end my poor mind's plight.
It struggles hard to write and rhyme
It finds it hard to scribble in time.
My boredom does not help its case
For I have no thoughts or expressions upon my face.
Oh to write when bordom strikes,
is truely the most epic of fights.
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Re: BOREDOM!
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by Necromant on
Sunday, 11th January 2004 @ 05:24:23 PM AEST
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WoW! And you say you don't know how to write! At least you've written something out of boredom lol! Very true! I myself am bored right now! I need to write something! Argghh....Continue writing! Waiting for more!! ;)
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Re: BOREDOM!
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by emystar on
Sunday, 11th January 2004 @ 05:29:42 PM AEST
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Good work.
fantasize something good and write it down.
We luv good fantasy round here.
huggs, luv, peace,
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Re: BOREDOM!
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by forever_lonely on
Sunday, 11th January 2004 @ 07:21:57 PM AEST
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very clever indeed my friend
you are always the one to make something outta nothing lol
luke
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Re: BOREDOM!
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 11th January 2004 @ 07:52:20 PM AEST
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It invokes the smell of raspberries on a dusky, mid-summer afternoon. A phenominal piece of artistry which where it lacks in intensity makes up in extensive jollity. How the poem soothes the aching pain of that which you describe, the eternal demon that plagues us all, that which brings low even the greatest of men, BOREDOM.
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Re: BOREDOM!
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by monkey on
Sunday, 11th January 2004 @ 08:17:29 PM AEST
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Nice poem. Although I'm not old enuff to have a job this sounds like me everyday at school. My mind wanders every minute of class. Hey! I think I just got an idea. lol thanx!
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Re: BOREDOM!
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by a_bear on
Friday, 16th January 2004 @ 02:48:08 AM AEST
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| HI! A-bear here. I love to get started on boredom. Man get me a soapbox. LOL As to the poem the last three lines...especially the one beginning "For I have no thoughts ... it seems too long and clumsy. Had it been me I would shorten it somehow, maybe like, "There reflects no thought upon my face.".... The next line I have no problem with..but the last one..strikes and fights don't really rhyme... so my suggestion would be to use the sites rhyming dictionary. Otherwise..Thumbs up! Hope you don't mind my brutal honesty.....? |
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