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Mercurial
Contributed by
Vitreous_Soul
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Sunday, 11th January 2004 @ 06:39:38 AM in AEST
Topic:
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To enter a room, to be alone in a crowd
To hide in a corner and pretend to be proud
Slot reels turn, what will I become
I am but a pendulum
Will this be the night I assume a smile
Drift unnoticed, act alive for a while
This is the guise that follows the drum
The only bright band in this aphotic spectrum
Am I oblivion, am I sealed or free
I'm standing right here, but you'll never see me
Gears grind around, what will I become
I am but a pendulum
Will this be the day I feel artistic
Or choose my fate and evolve into a statistic
Every time this cruel gauntlet is run
Another cloud forms to darken the sun
Walking in circles, I know this drifter
He is as myself, a lonely shapeshifter
What does he seek, what is he after
Something complex or just simple laughter
Antiquated clock, time ever changing
Captures my mood with it's pendulum swing
What are these changes, where do they come from
I cry for the snap of this undying spectrum
So it continues, shuffling day by day
I'll embrace you with passion then cast you away
The metronome ticks, what will I become
I am but a pendulum
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Re: Mercurial
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by Necromant on
Sunday, 11th January 2004 @ 09:02:33 AM AEST
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Whao!! I'm impressed by the beautiful imagery you used to describe the feelings. So very true and realistic. This is a very beautiful poem!! Great write!!
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Re: Mercurial
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by lovingcritters on
Sunday, 11th January 2004 @ 06:14:41 PM AEST
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Vs, this was a splendid poem indeed.
I can still see that big pendulum going back and forth in the museum in Denver. Never
stopping, going left and then right. Going from extreme to another...never able to hit a happy medium...wonderful imagery, and I hope every day, you will be able to slow down abit and think it through, I think you and I are on the same level...just different generations, and ways of dealing. I could never concentrate on myself....if I did...I came off reeling....but it I concentrated on others, it helped me clear the cobwebs and the dithers
Beautiful poem.
Warm Poetic Love * hugs.
ConSue
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Re: Mercurial
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by forever_lonely on
Thursday, 15th January 2004 @ 06:08:47 PM AEST
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Amazing i love your use of imagery, unexplainable truely another masterpeice
clever, full of feeling and emotions and yet so very true
All the best
Luke |
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Re: Mercurial
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by Cobalt on
Monday, 19th January 2004 @ 03:55:36 PM AEST
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| V.S. man that was awesome. The first couple of lines just grabbed ya and swept ya away. I really liked this one. |
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Re: Mercurial
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 15th February 2004 @ 09:47:20 PM AEST
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| I like this a lot. It resonates with my perspective rather well. Thanks. |
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Re: Mercurial
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by PoeticReign on
Friday, 23rd April 2004 @ 02:45:17 AM AEST
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Hey VS -
i agree with the other comment -- the first 2 lines are so captivating... draws you right in. exactly how i feel when i walk in a room.
"I'll embrace you with passion then cast you away..." the art of phrasing reality is truly a gift!
"I'm standing right here, but you'll never see me".... i feel this every single day. I know people see me cuz they look at the outside, but they don't really SEE me, cuz I'm different. I'm sure most of the people on this site can relate to this poem...
i know this wasn't one of the poems you suggested, but it caught my eye ;)
great job, D :) way to go!
~N
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Re: Mercurial
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by Fionndruinne on
Friday, 23rd April 2004 @ 11:29:33 PM AEST
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Ah, well done! Exactly what I tried to say to someone a little while back, but you have done much better than I. The pendulum is an excellent metaphor.
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