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I Fall
Contributed by
afraid_of_fear
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Saturday, 10th January 2004 @ 07:46:44 PM in AEST
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Through my mind insanity is sweeping
No need to bind me as I lay weeping
I shan’t be rising again; this is my final fall
I knew this would finish, I knew I would end it all
I scrape away the last tear on my cheek
Throwing away words of me remaining this freak
I open my eyes, and say goodbye to this life
I shut everything out, and beg for the knife
Let me slice away, one last time
Yet another attempt, dare you call this a crime?
Feel free to say what you will
Feel free to cry out as I beg for the kill
Wordless noise tears at my blood
Understand, I’ll never be understood
Light the candles, set the scene
See what has come and been
Bleed through your eyes as you feel my pain
Claw at your skin as you feel my rain
But reality will never sink in, you’ll never know
Why this must be the end, this must be so
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Re: I Fall
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by Necromant on
Saturday, 10th January 2004 @ 07:51:20 PM AEST
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This is amazing! Well chosen words, can taste pain and smell bitterness. Really good writing. But don't give up!
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Re: I Fall
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by SkYYBLu on
Saturday, 10th January 2004 @ 07:55:13 PM AEST
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| .... ....very moving... ... ... |
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Re: I Fall
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by bluoreo on
Saturday, 10th January 2004 @ 07:55:17 PM AEST
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| The tone was set really well. I really enjoyed reading it and I could feel the emotion pouring out of it. |
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Re: I Fall
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by shelby on
Saturday, 10th January 2004 @ 08:26:10 PM AEST
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raw emotions in this poem great expression throughout. Dont give up!!
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Re: I Fall
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 6th February 2004 @ 03:10:29 PM AEST
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Your open wounds are so apparent in this visual play of words, wrought with raw emotion!!! You will never give up as long as the angels are watching over you! 0:-)
~~~Angel~~~always...godspeed...joni |
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Re: I Fall
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by arden on
Monday, 16th February 2004 @ 07:09:35 PM AEST
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that was wow lol so good, freakin good write. loved it loved it.
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Re: I Fall
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by secretwind on
Thursday, 6th May 2004 @ 08:55:14 PM AEST
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| Light the candles set the scene....love this one. |
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Re: I Fall
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by blueheart on
Monday, 17th May 2004 @ 05:15:34 AM AEST
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| I've written a poem entitled I Fall too. Yours is truly brilliant. Very dark, its gotten me chilled to the bone. |
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