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blue green sweater
Contributed by
fallensilence
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Saturday, 10th January 2004 @ 05:33:42 PM in AEST
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i'm almost sure now
but im positive that i cannot make up my mind
sure im not sure
you're lovely, your blue green sweater
its murder to my eyes
leaning on blasphemy
turn around once more and meet your eyes with mine
whisper secrets in my ear
secrets that i never hear
im so enamored and we've only met once
if this were a fairy tale you would want me too
but life does not imitate art here
you are farther than you are near
i could be with you but its this ------- fear
this feeling is fading like so many times before
god if you could feel this
why did this fal upon me
but i would have killed to smile this way again
and here you are giving it away for free.
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2004-01-10 17:33:42]
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Re: blue green sweater
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by dolly_dagger on
Saturday, 10th January 2004 @ 05:40:13 PM AEST
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| im liking it a lot. *claps* suitably indecipherable lol |
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Re: blue green sweater
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by SkYYBLu on
Saturday, 10th January 2004 @ 07:23:05 PM AEST
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I loved this and I could decipher it! (lol) It reminded me of the one whom I love and I'm almost threatened by him because it's this... ...fear. I can't talk to him because I'm scared. It's knowing that he might find out about the way you feel about him. This is very thought provocing. I loved it!
~Paige |
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Re: blue green sweater
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by tease_whizz on
Friday, 16th January 2004 @ 12:01:38 AM AEST
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how much impact one meeting can be, it really can make us crave a world of ideals. as always, some simple lines just shoot straight into me with a poignancy and rawness of emotion that is rare to find. "god if you could feel this" is a strong and easily empathisable line and the last two lines are graceful in their expression of thought.
an excellent write :) keep them coming for me, Kate x |
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Re: blue green sweater
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by Cobalt on
Friday, 16th January 2004 @ 11:18:25 AM AEST
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| I really like how you wrote this. Great use of words. |
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