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In our heart
Contributed by
Necromant
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Thursday, 8th January 2004 @ 04:09:06 PM in AEST
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You came to me out of desperation,
Begging me to be your inspiration,
Laying me down on the bed,
Making me wonder what’s going on in your head,
You told me to hush and just feel,
I couldn’t believe that what was happening was real,
Your gentle sweet touch pulled me out of my reverie,
You kissed away my doubts, I’d never felt so free,
You pushed into me and increased the pace,
I will never forget the expression on your face,
Your constricted look turned into relief,
After feeling the beginning of the desired release,
As our scent mingled together,
I wondered if it was the end,
Before you left you told me that,
This was the last time, you must depart,
But we’ll always keep this memory hidden deep within our heart.......
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Necromant
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2004-01-08 16:09:06]
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Re: In our heart
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by Putteragain on
Thursday, 8th January 2004 @ 04:40:11 PM AEST
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goodbye sex have had it
good write looking forward to more
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Re: In our heart
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by MrWrite on
Thursday, 8th January 2004 @ 04:50:01 PM AEST
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| Great job. Very well written. |
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Re: In our heart
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by Empty_Soul on
Thursday, 8th January 2004 @ 05:20:04 PM AEST
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not dark like your other poetry but still a good write. nothing wrong with a bit of goodbye sex! Its a great way 2 end, hehe. Very good imagery here, lookin forward, once again, to your next write! =)
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Re: In our heart
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by Cobalt on
Thursday, 8th January 2004 @ 05:25:53 PM AEST
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| I have never heard of nor had goodbye sex... I think that's kinda bad.... Just me... Nah. I would if given the chance lol. I liked it. It was kinda sweet. I liked the wording. |
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Re: In our heart
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 8th January 2004 @ 08:47:06 PM AEST
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| Well, good bye sex can be both good and bad it depends, in this case I think it was a good choice. Good memories indeed.....Pity it was the first time as well |
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Re: In our heart
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by bluoreo on
Friday, 9th January 2004 @ 12:53:14 AM AEST
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| I think the poem was very well written, but when i have sex I'm going to make sure he will be there in the morning. |
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Re: In our heart
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by whisper-of-night on
Thursday, 15th January 2004 @ 10:31:10 AM AEST
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| Wuuuuw, cheeky naughty! (*blush*)^_^ But I don't sure if the goodbye sex is a good idea though, I always thought sex should be holy and with love, (thats why it called, Make Love, right?) A kiss, a hug, yeah ok, but sex?? Especially its 'out of desperation'? Just want some 'inspiration'?(*scratching my head*) Ooooo I dunno, Im too old fashion I guess ^_^........ |
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Re: In our heart
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by ladyfawn on
Thursday, 26th February 2004 @ 11:10:54 PM AEST
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| oooooo! |
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Re: In our heart
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by rhymeandreason on
Thursday, 18th March 2004 @ 04:51:31 PM AEST
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I liked the contradictory nature of this one. It Rings true, as remembered experiences that I had when younger. First the attraction, turning to need then the confusion/denial of the event or its meaning. consequenly, the hidden memory. Happens a lot when "friends" cross that boundry between what that is, into the realm of something, not necessarily more as much as so differant that the way back to friends is not easy or even assured. good write.
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Re: In our heart
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by rhymeandreason on
Thursday, 18th March 2004 @ 04:51:31 PM AEST
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I liked the contradictory nature of this one. It Rings true, as remembered experiences that I had when younger. First the attraction, turning to need then the confusion/denial of the event or its meaning. consequenly, the hidden memory. Happens a lot when "friends" cross that boundry between what that is, into the realm of something, not necessarily more as much as so differant that the way back to friends is not easy or even assured. good write.
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