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the past
Contributed by
dena
on
Thursday, 8th January 2004 @ 03:21:51 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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You are hot,
And i am not.
There is a thought,
I wont get caught.
I love you,
Please dont tell.
Within your head,
A brain is there.
Caring is what u are,
But why are u so far?
My feelings are so strong,
I am doing so wrong.
For i love you,
But i want u to like me too.
Is it so hard to ask?
Just forget about what happened in the past.
There is a war,
To my life,
Please oh please just be nice.
Your brown hair,
Your green eyes,
I knew in you i could confide.
Snuggling, i dream of that day,
Its in the past and you'll never stay.
I wish you would i think u should,
In my heart your'll stay for good.
Copyright ©
dena
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2004-01-08 15:21:51]
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Re: the past
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by Solmyr1404 on
Thursday, 8th January 2004 @ 03:39:36 PM AEST
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| That's so sad that you don't have his love. I know how you feel because I've gone through the same thing for the last seven years. |
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Re: the past
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by MissTea on
Thursday, 8th January 2004 @ 03:50:42 PM AEST
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I liked the way u've kept up the rhyming throughout the poem. i hope one day you will be snuggling with the one you love.
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Re: the past
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by Cobalt on
Monday, 12th January 2004 @ 04:40:18 PM AEST
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| Nicely done. You really conveyed those feelings well. |
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