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Contributed by
Necromant
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Wednesday, 7th January 2004 @ 02:22:59 PM in AEST
Topic:
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I’m running alone the dark,
In the neighbourhood I hear dogs bark,
The wind is whispering in my ears,
My hands tremble with unwanted fear,
I stumble in a secluded area and stop,
I reach out my hand feeling a rain drop,
I ring my bells calling for aid silently in my head,
Help comes from the crawling long time dead,
I send my plea trough my eyes and they understand,
Slowly they arrive at my side bringing my life to an end.
Copyright ©
Necromant
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2004-01-07 14:22:59]
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Re: Help
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by alecfernadez on
Wednesday, 7th January 2004 @ 03:02:56 PM AEST
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I like the way you made it read fast, in almost a running pace kinda style,
good read
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Re: Help
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by Empty_Soul on
Wednesday, 7th January 2004 @ 06:29:25 PM AEST
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read ur poems in reverse order, lol. i like the other one slightly more, this has a very good pace to it though, it makes you feel as if you are the one running,
great write
ES |
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Re: Help
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by Cobalt on
Thursday, 8th January 2004 @ 05:41:21 PM AEST
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| Interesting. It almost feels like there should be more. Yet somehow feels complete.... |
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Re: Help
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 13th January 2004 @ 03:37:38 PM AEST
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it needs reading twice and thought. the last 4 verses are really nice.
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