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By The Tears
Contributed by
Vitreous_Soul
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Wednesday, 7th January 2004 @ 05:51:18 AM in AEST
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By the bank where the forgotten river flows
There's a tranquil place I always go
This chapel of mine
This cloistered shrine
A refuge from the cold world I know
A secluded glade in which I cry
Howling wind in the trees a lullaby
These tears of rain
These drops of pain
This pitiless storm will never die
By the tears on the ground a path is laid
By the sound of a harp my opus is played
This bleak harmony
A tragic symphony
Piercing notes and sullen cries become a serenade
I walk away and leave my soul cast aside
Returning when I need a serene place to hide
Hide the key
To this reliquary
Until the time comes again to bury what's inside
Now that place I loved to go
Is mournfully covered in a blanket of snow
Gone is the glow
The leaves are yellow
The frozen river will no longer flow
Long past my time, at the end of my years
Watch for my ghost, every Autumn he appears
A grave forlorn
No flowers adorn
Never forget this path, forever laden with my tears
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Re: By The Tears
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by Kie on
Wednesday, 7th January 2004 @ 08:44:24 AM AEST
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Your descriptions took me there in your poem. So deeply poetic and so very sad.
Beautiful, I loved it-
Kie |
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Re: By The Tears
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by lovingcritters on
Wednesday, 7th January 2004 @ 09:56:50 AM AEST
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Dear VS,Your path of tears reminds me of the journey made by the Indians when they lost their land.....they too had a path of tears such as yours....this is a magnificent poem VS....kid you not....very touching, forlorn, and not soon to be forgotten!
lovingcritters
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Re: By The Tears
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Wednesday, 7th January 2004 @ 04:15:18 PM AEST
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Absolutely beautiful.... Loved this..
Jenni |
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Re: By The Tears
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by SkYYBLu on
Wednesday, 7th January 2004 @ 07:05:02 PM AEST
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| wow...beautiful poem... |
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Re: By The Tears
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by eternal_sorrows on
Wednesday, 7th January 2004 @ 08:48:35 PM AEST
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This is a very beautiful piece. Very deep emotional yet, so perfect. Good write!
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Re: By The Tears
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by forever_lonely on
Wednesday, 7th January 2004 @ 09:18:31 PM AEST
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vs you strike again, and this time you hit dead center, this write was magnificent a true master peice, your descriptive use of imagery and the flow fo this write just threw me back and excsue the term 'made my mouth water with anticipation' for your next peice
keep it up vs
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Re: By The Tears
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by Cobalt on
Thursday, 8th January 2004 @ 01:12:17 PM AEST
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| I liked the ryming and flow of this. The wording was excellent. Good write mate. |
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Re: By The Tears
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by Necromant on
Thursday, 8th January 2004 @ 01:50:19 PM AEST
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| Oh wow!!! *Speechless* Strong emotions running wild, makes you want to cry.....Very beautiful and deep! A true piece of literature. |
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Re: By The Tears
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by venkat on
Friday, 9th January 2004 @ 01:02:48 AM AEST
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| good discription..emotionally sad..poetic in expression and excellent way of writing. venkat |
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Re: By The Tears
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by Eve on
Thursday, 15th January 2004 @ 02:24:22 PM AEST
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That's it. I hereby steal thy talent that I may become un-green with envy. Another beautiful one, VS.
Keep writing (or suffer),
-Eve. |
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Re: By The Tears
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by blueheart on
Wednesday, 28th January 2004 @ 11:57:18 PM AEST
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| Sad poem, touching to say the least. I'm at awe at your talent. |
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Re: By The Tears
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 12th January 2005 @ 06:23:28 AM AEST
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"Gone is the glow"
and gone,
is the dream . . . |
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Re: By The Tears
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 12th January 2005 @ 03:54:40 PM AEST
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This was certainly moving, and how refreshing and inspiring to see your poem here again.
Missed you -and been waiting for something like this - |
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