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the erotic art of freezing your lover to death pt. 1
Contributed by
Cancer
on
Monday, 5th January 2004 @ 12:46:23 AM in AEST
Topic:
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fascinated
my eyes never leave you
like a nurse by the bed
rubbing lotion
on the rope burns on your wrists and ankles
so in love
or so i think
it could be another passing infatuation
and you could end up
another mound of fresh soil
in the back yard
sometimes i lie beside you
and stare in the mirror
we make a nice couple
it all just looks so right
sleep is my greatest enemy
for all the moments it steals from me
so i set up the camera
to record every whimper
every tear
that i might miss in sleep
so sad to see you lose your shine
so sad to feel my interest fade
so long i dreamt of having you
so quickly you grew old
just enough pills
to keep you asleep
not enough to kill you
deep into the woods
then deeper still
i want to hear you cry
i want to hear you scream
and i don't want to be disturbed
in the car with the heater on
until you come around
you wake naked
too drugged to run
i carry you out of the car
and place you on the snow covered ground
locking the chain around your ankle
the other end around a tree
you try to stand
i smile, and strike you back down
my own body warms
at the sight of you shivering
shivering from the cold?
or shivering from fear?
you squirm
the snow and bitter wind
biting into your bare flesh
your tears like sleet on your face
curious, you watch
as i drag the buckets of water
from the back of the car
dropping handfuls of snow into each
before pulling out the next
i kneel with you
running numb hands across your breasts
sliding my knuckles gently over your stomach
splayed fingers dragging up your thighs
probing and exploring your darker parts
feeling your fear
exciting me
making me want you
making me want to....
grabbing your chin
forcing a kiss
your lips like ice
yet they inspire such warmth
in certain parts
i stand and hoist a bucket
emptying it over your head
your body tenses
your eyes stretch wide
and your mouth freezes (hehe)
in a circular painting of pain
silently, i pray
that you don't have a heart attack
not yet
for a few heart stopping moments
you don't move
save for the twitching of your blue hands
your breast never moves
and i fear that you're gone
then it breaks
and you scream
louder than any previous plaything
and my excitement only grows
your scream is broken by a wet gurgle
biting my lip as i watch your throat working
trying to produce another scream
only able to emit a series of bloody rasps and grunts
the first stream of blood
dribbles over your lip
slowly cascading down your chin
the brush stroke of crimson
contrasting your dead pale skin
and my will falls
i fall on you
descending like some animalistic predator
pinning you to the cold bed of sterile earth
erasing the red ribbon with my mouth
my body tingling with a pleasure
more gripping than i've ever known
your body lurching beneath me
chest heaving
your face, a badly woven tapestry
depicting an agony that failed to beckon death
you cough and shower me
with a small broken fountain of fresh blood
my mouth finds yours
my tounge probing
stealing the thick coat of blood
that sticks to the still-warm walls of your mouth.....
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Cancer
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Re: the erotic art of freezing your lover to death pt. 1
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by ShadowDaughter on
Monday, 5th January 2004 @ 12:53:04 AM AEST
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Oh, God . . .
The title hooked me.
Whoa, that was . . . non-expressable. Good, very good, the image accompanying it was vivid and scared me to death (bad metaphor here). I'm shivering now and I can't get the image out of my head. Owwww . . .
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Re: the erotic art of freezing your lover to death pt. 1
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by bobotheclown on
Monday, 5th January 2004 @ 01:42:09 AM AEST
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dude this awesomely, woven, dark, dark, dark, (did I say dark?) work of art. I loved the image of u setting up the camera to record everything that was bloody brilliant!!!!!!!! I loved how u felt her fear that was so animalistic. Ahh this was great. Hope to talk to you soon man.
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Re: the erotic art of freezing your lover to death pt. 1
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by jaeann on
Monday, 5th January 2004 @ 06:39:45 AM AEST
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| please ......let there be more.......... |
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Re: the erotic art of freezing your lover to death pt. 1
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by stitches on
Monday, 5th January 2004 @ 08:02:08 AM AEST
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see, now this is what they should use for a "when i bite into a york peppermint patty i..." commercial
Brilliant, as usual.
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Re: the erotic art of freezing your lover to death pt. 1
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by Kie on
Monday, 5th January 2004 @ 11:10:48 AM AEST
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Scary, my worst nightmare, literally!
This was so good I read it again...
Kie |
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Re: the erotic art of freezing your lover to death pt. 1
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 5th January 2004 @ 04:31:17 PM AEST
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Words cannot explain how good this is...
F0rm3rly Kn0//n |
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Re: the erotic art of freezing your lover to death pt. 1
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by DreamWeaver on
Monday, 5th January 2004 @ 05:21:56 PM AEST
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| Awesome ... you have a wicked imagination ... totally enthralling piece of work ... Jan |
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Re: the erotic art of freezing your lover to death pt. 1
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by sicknivesevered on
Monday, 5th January 2004 @ 05:39:10 PM AEST
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| Omfg, this is sick. There's just something about this that even I can't get down with. At least you wrote it well. I noticed a rather funny thing: you never rhyme, but it still flows nicely all the same. Arg. Reminds me of the kiss from "Sleepy Hollow". Yecch!!! |
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Re: the erotic art of freezing your lover to death pt. 1
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by Cobalt on
Tuesday, 6th January 2004 @ 11:25:38 AM AEST
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| This is one of the most interesting erotic dark and chilling pieces I have ever read. Lay it on thicker mate and roll with the son of a *****. Sweeeeeeeeeeet! ***** awesome man! |
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Re: the erotic art of freezing your lover to death pt. 1
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by MissTea on
Saturday, 10th January 2004 @ 04:38:08 AM AEST
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WOW...WOWWOWWOW!!! is really all i can say, WOW!! so sinister yet so...erotic! So evil...yet so innocent! WOW I love it. can't wait to read the next part
WOW
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Re: the erotic art of freezing your lover to death pt. 1
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 15th January 2004 @ 12:56:36 AM AEST
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| As I said, dark poetry is the purest form (somewhere in the forums back here), since each one is unique and distinctive from the other. I'm happy you did not prove me wrong. |
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