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a single breath pt 2
Contributed by
stitches
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Tuesday, 30th December 2003 @ 01:43:23 PM in AEST
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masquerade, you filthy whore
i know you're still here
you took so much of what i was
you and he
threw it away
like so much trash
IT WASN'T WHAT YOU WANTED?!
all of this
what we had
so pure
now tainted
for what?!
oh
You were lonely
how many times did you give me the illusion of control?
how many times was it real?
nothing is safe now
you can't destroy the statue of reflection
the statue of mirrors
masquerade, you, just a walking puss sac
everything you touched in my life
turned to bile
go ahead, pray to your little goddess
burn a piece of incense, light a candle,
the gods will not give what IS NOT yours to keep
you really are the weaker one
and i was weak once too
but your venom has gone soft
it beckoned to me
i let you take control of my life
but now, i have overcome
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Re: a single breath pt 2
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by alecfernadez on
Tuesday, 30th December 2003 @ 03:53:47 PM AEST
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| powerful and angry, I sure you put it in the right place? Anyway peace |
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Re: a single breath pt 2
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by bobotheclown on
Wednesday, 31st December 2003 @ 12:04:06 AM AEST
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I don't get how this relates to part I but it was still good. I liked the spite and accusing tone in it. Very strong.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: a single breath pt 2
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by stitches on
Wednesday, 31st December 2003 @ 09:21:56 AM AEST
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to respond to your comment joel, the first part, as in the authors note, is "written in ignorance"
it's how i first felt love with my mate
pt 2 is about the intrusion of a third party into the same relationship |
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Re: a single breath pt 2
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by Cobalt on
Wednesday, 31st December 2003 @ 11:55:38 AM AEST
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| That was incredible... I realized there was a gap there though inbetween the two. I kinda figured that's what it was about... Lol. Very angry and yet somehow a beautiful write if you put your head to the right angle. Seems like quite a story that would be told behind these poems. I really liked them both as I could fully relate.... |
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