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Another Year Older.
Contributed by
Jessica_Saini
on
Saturday, 13th July 2002 @ 02:12:47 PM in AEST
Topic:
BirthdayPoems
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Another year older, is hard to fake,
When all the candles are on the cake!
Another year of heaven and hell,
You may, or may not remember well!
A time to laugh, or a time to cry,
Maybe to eat goodies on the sly!
To be with family, and with friends,
And with your sweetheart until the end!
Jokes will fly about your advanced age,
So a jokes war is what you’ll wage!
You might not be as spry as you were,
But you will always be my dear sir!
Copyright ©
Jessica_Saini
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2002-07-13 14:12:47]
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Re: Another Year Older.
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by Jackee_line on
Monday, 4th November 2002 @ 03:46:53 AM AEST
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very nice , a great poem.
What i don"t understand is that 160 people read your poem and not one left a comment..I found your poem to be very sweet and real. great job
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Re: Another Year Older.
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by banjo on
Monday, 24th March 2003 @ 09:21:09 PM AEST
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| ok, so you can rhyme. good. now work on rhythm. syllables. ba-dump ba-dump ba-dump. know what I mean? It makes the rhyme actually readable. |
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Re: Another Year Older.
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by ladyfawn on
Wednesday, 26th March 2003 @ 10:10:20 PM AEST
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| i think this is lovely and flows very well, hugs n' love to you both:) nessa |
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Re: Another Year Older.
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 27th March 2003 @ 07:37:03 PM AEST
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| I think that this is such a great peom Im given to my frind for her birthday i no that she'll love it too |
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Re: Another Year Older.
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by Broken-glass on
Wednesday, 20th August 2003 @ 06:51:10 PM AEST
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| Remember poems are not songs, so why must they have rhythm? Poetry can be jagged, yet still effective. Very good poem, I enjoyed it. |
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Re: Another Year Older.
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by M2003UK on
Wednesday, 8th October 2003 @ 06:29:27 AM AEST
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| Its a great poem! well done :) |
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Re: Another Year Older.
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by neglected1 on
Sunday, 22nd February 2004 @ 07:55:51 PM AEST
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| alright i know how some people said you needed "rhyme" but it is actaully meter that is DAH duh DAH duh and so on... but i like your free verse it makes it more interesting without having a certain expression that is not needed.... it was very enjoyable to read!! |
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