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woe
Contributed by
stitches
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Monday, 29th December 2003 @ 09:37:38 AM in AEST
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fear binds my tongue
choke on the pain
knife to my wrist
what explanation can i give
in a simple written note
if only you could be here
to see the reasons
as one by one,
then in a steady flow
it drips to the floor...
so beautiful...
my mind hums to the beat
of my fading pulse
smoke curls around my lungs
my breath comes so...
slow...
so clear now
quiet,
yet
I
the fool
who dared brave the lions den
to live or to die
it matters not
it's ALL in the mind
long ago
two souls entertwined
broken by failure
pasted and patched
by the bitterness of time
without one
the other cannot die
screaming
awakening
to the harshest reality
Life
how long will i cry
before the tears come
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Re: woe
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by jme on
Monday, 29th December 2003 @ 05:13:53 PM AEST
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| Wow. Great write. You are so vivid. |
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Re: woe
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by bobotheclown on
Tuesday, 30th December 2003 @ 09:27:23 PM AEST
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fear binds my tongue
I LOVED that line as well as the whole poem. I love the vividness and imagery in this poem. The dark soul of this poem made it beautiful.
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Re: woe
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by bobotheclown on
Tuesday, 30th December 2003 @ 09:32:22 PM AEST
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sry for commenting again but I am spellbound by this poem after reading it about 5 times. I can relate to it so well and fits my present state of mind perfectly. I must also say that this is your best poem I have read of yours so far and I must thank you for sharing this with us.
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Re: woe
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by Cobalt on
Tuesday, 30th December 2003 @ 11:46:28 PM AEST
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| I have no clue how but I missed this.... I am awed by this. It's absolutely amazing... The darkness of the imagery. Darkly beautiful... Damn Joel you where right.... I can't even think of enough ways to describe this... |
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Re: woe
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by Cobalt on
Friday, 2nd January 2004 @ 12:01:22 PM AEST
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Yeah, sorry this poem is somewhat addicting. I loved these lines myself
'how long will i cry
before the tears come'
Just deeply awesome. I've felt that way. |
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Re: woe
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by afraid_of_fear on
Friday, 2nd January 2004 @ 07:07:41 PM AEST
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wow, this is completely breath-taking! i was recommended to read this, and i.. wow.. u are an amazing writer.. so talented.. wow..
charlotte x_x_x |
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Re: woe
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by me on
Tuesday, 6th January 2004 @ 05:42:33 PM AEST
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i loved the last two lines too(as well as the whole poem, and everything else of yours i read so far...)
you're so good!!!!
luv,
myrts |
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