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Poetry
Contributed by
LOST_KIDD
on
Thursday, 25th December 2003 @ 07:40:42 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Hello life how are you
lady can you guide me through
help me to write poetry
show me happiness give me pain
let move pump through the vain
that leads to the soft part of every being
since the start the art in me beating
not wanting to but repeating every mistake life this part keeps me awake
poetry help me elude this fate
be slicker then my snake
love, lady, life
poetry write my fate
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2003-12-25 19:40:42]
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Re: Poetry
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by Jellybellyprincess on
Thursday, 25th December 2003 @ 07:58:02 PM AEST
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Oooh, the end is absolutely stunning.... especially the last three or four (like "be slicker then my snake"... that's my very fave part of the whole thing.... love that line )
You did very well on this one =)
God bless, and Merry Christmas too =)
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Re: Poetry
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by lovingcritters on
Friday, 26th December 2003 @ 02:04:18 AM AEST
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Lost Kidd,
This is very clever poetry. I really enjoyed it.
You are very talented, indeed.
What would we poets do without our poetry!
We'd all be lost for sure.
Great Write, I reread it about 3 times.
lovingcritters
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