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signs
Contributed by
aernby
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Tuesday, 23rd December 2003 @ 08:03:23 PM in AEST
Topic:
Haiku
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west win, north star
the sun's daily ramble -
guides on the journey
Copyright ©
aernby
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2003-12-23 20:03:23]
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Re: signs
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by Menelaus on
Friday, 16th January 2004 @ 12:51:34 AM AEST
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| Hmmmmmm...well, urm.....it seems okay...theme seems quite fine...but in my opinion more could be done.....how about more descriptive words? and don't forget to max out the 5-7-5 syllable count, too.... |
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Re: signs
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by Manicmuze on
Friday, 16th January 2004 @ 09:28:31 AM AEST
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This is a lovely image... haiku should be 5,7,5 syllable's... you can work with this and i'm sure make it fall into place.
Very nice visual, enjoyed this,
~ Wendy |
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