|
Menu
|
|
|
Social
|
|
|
|
By Myself
Contributed by
Rhymestein
on
Sunday, 21st December 2003 @ 01:25:44 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
|
I soon awake,
Then realize the mistake,
Of how the way I used to feel
For me to believe your love was real,
You always left me by myself to heal.
You chained me away,
Forcing me to watch you walk away.
I wish memories of you would fade away,
Remembering hurts me each and every day.
What I feel in me,
Every time I awake,
Is this memory.
A memory of my mistake.
Of how I tried so hard then,
Trying once more,
Will be hurting myself again.
Did I see things blindly.
Did I ignore the things behind me.
Trusting in you seemed senseless,
I just left my heart defenseless.
Why did I give it all,
To someone who's going to let me fall?
Why did you place me on the shelf,
Alone and By Myself.
Copyright ©
Rhymestein
... [
2003-12-21 13:25:44] (Date/Time posted on
site)
Advertisments:
|
|
|
|
|
Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more
|
|
All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry
Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any
comment. That said, if you find an offensive comment, please
contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title
etc.
|
|
|
Re: By Myself
(User Rating: 1 ) by LouisaMontagu on
Sunday, 21st December 2003 @ 01:32:20 PM AEST (User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
A gr8 poem, the expressions just seemed flowing... very touching xx keep it up |
|
|
Re: By Myself
(User Rating: 1 ) by secretwind on
Sunday, 21st December 2003 @ 03:27:52 PM AEST (User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
WELL DONE. |
|
|
Re: By Myself
(User Rating: 1 ) by springfield on
Sunday, 21st December 2003 @ 04:59:47 PM AEST (User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Very good. I can relate. |
|
|
Re: By Myself
(User Rating: 1 ) by harshreality on
Sunday, 21st December 2003 @ 08:43:41 PM AEST (User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
This was so sad. No matter how many times you fall, Just remember to Love Like You've Never Been Hurt. Its the only way to do it!! |
|
|
Re: By Myself
(User Rating: 1 ) by Fudge on
Monday, 22nd December 2003 @ 12:41:24 AM AEST (User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
its a very nice poem. i think a lot of us have felt this way. i guess it's a fact of life, but remember you're not really alone. |
|
|
Re: By Myself
(User Rating: 1 ) by MoonlitAngel on
Monday, 22nd December 2003 @ 01:56:58 AM AEST (User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Critique wise, I think it might be slightly better if the first and third stanza had the same format, since the second, fourth and fifth are basically the same. Artistically, I enjoyed it, very good write! Great rhymes, they make it flow really well.
~ Moonlit |
|
|
|