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Seaside Suicide
Contributed by
Demon
on
Thursday, 29th August 2002 @ 08:07:33 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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Standing on a rock..
into the ocean my necklace I tossed
This day is the day
a young yet wasted life lost.
Watching waves crashing
the water hits my feet
I close my eyes and think
the promise to live..
I can no longer keep.
I think back on everything
everything good and bad
I try to take it all in
all moments happy and sad
but the bad tends to outwiegh the good
just like the hate does the love
I tried to think Id pull through and be strong
but the life I lived seemed too tough.
I now think that I may not go to heaven
for all the bad things that ive done
I know I havent pleased "God"
but im just one of his many sons.
They say his perfect
but he made a mistake with me
he gave me opportunities
he gave me doors to chances
but no key.
There's something that I do know though
and something that I feel..
its the hurt inside and the angst deep down
that sometimes seems so surreal.
Its a gut wrenching feeling
to know your trapped within yourself
you're your own worst enemy
too scared to cry for help.
I thought about my family
I lost my mum when I was 5
now im 25..
living with everything to hide.
What's life when you cant show true feelings?
Is it a wasted one?
What are you contributing?
NOTHING.
Sometimes i wished
that I could take away other peoples pain
I think had that of been the case..
I wouldn't be here today.
When someone said that my one good quality
was something which by others unseen
they took away the one thought that kept me here
the one thing that made me,ME.
My kids used to be the strength
they used to be all i needed to continue
but I always said..
I also needed you.
I never cried in front nobody
I was always too ashamed
and although I feel you watching me
It doesnt matter because....
Im standing in the rain.
Copyright ©
Demon
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2002-08-29 20:07:33]
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Re: Seaside Suicide
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Thursday, 29th August 2002 @ 09:17:23 PM AEST
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Great write....a bit sad... sometimes we need t ask fr help....and yes, it's the best place to write.....
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Re: Seaside Suicide
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by Avery on
Friday, 30th August 2002 @ 12:24:00 AM AEST
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beautiful write, i love the tranquility of the ocean and i know that writing helps heal, keep it up
Avery :) |
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Re: Seaside Suicide
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by chatabox on
Friday, 30th August 2002 @ 01:03:49 AM AEST
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Well the ocean has inspired you to write a most lovely poem here. Dont be too harsh on yourself, let it out and cry, I can assure you it helps.
Pen. |
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Re: Seaside Suicide
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 30th August 2002 @ 02:07:39 AM AEST
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| I agree with the last comment made up there,Don't be scared to cry in front of people.This write is very gripping and i can tell it's coming from deep down.It's really sad and i do hope it's fictional,but if it's not.Keep your head up,Keep smiling because tomorrow is a brand new day. |
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Re: Seaside Suicide
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by MisterRight on
Friday, 30th August 2002 @ 05:14:04 AM AEST
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Well written poem, very sad though. It's okay to cry in front of people. Trying to always be the strong one, you only end up hurting yourself more.
Yes the beach is a great place to write. When I lived in Florida I used to go to the beach once a week to watch the sunrise and write. The beach is where I wrote my first poem.
Keep writing!
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Re: Seaside Suicide
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by bobotheclown on
Friday, 30th August 2002 @ 06:14:28 AM AEST
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Wow... thats all I can say. I can totally relate to a lot of this. One thing I can say is I can feel your pain and I know what its like to stand in the rain. Totally. i dont know what to say. This left me shocked. Great poem bud. I'll definitely be looking for more of yer stuff.
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